Some people think that students should be taught subjects like science and computers at schools instead of wasting time and money in music and art classes. I completely disagree with this statement because students should be allowed to explore all the subject areas rather than focusing only on some limited areas.
Only studying subjects like science, maths and computers make students monotonous. As we know, these subjects are comparatively tough than other subjects. The students also try too hard on understanding those subjects to secure good grades in the examination. Sometimes, some students even lose interest in their study if they are not allowed to do any other extra activities except studying. So, there must be few extra classes for them to enjoy their day at school in spite of all the tough study they have to do.
Not all students are interested in science. Some of them might be interested in music or arts. Also, some students can be good in both science and music or arts. Having art and music classes help them to actually bring out their hidden talent in front of the whole world. Furthermore, it will give them a chance to be creative. In addition, such classes help students to decrease the stress of study. This, in turn, will help them to be focused on their study since a stress-free mind can learn things quickly and accurately.
Similarly, being in such classes not only help students to enjoy their day at school but also keep them occupied during their free time. Instead of wasting their time in watching television and playing computer games, they can practice music and art and be creative. This way they will be entertaining themselves as well as practising and enhancing perfection on what they love.
To sum up, classes like music and arts are really important for students. This should be made available in every school to motivate students in extra-curricular activities along with their study which will help them in their intellectual development.
Some
people
think
that
students
should
be taught
subjects
like
science
and computers at
schools
instead
of wasting time and money in
music
and
art
classes
. I completely disagree with this statement
because
students
should be
allowed
to explore all the
subject
areas
rather
than focusing
only
on
some
limited areas.
Only
studying
subjects
like
science
,
maths
and computers
make
students
monotonous. As we know, these
subjects
are
comparatively
tough
than other
subjects
. The
students
also
try too
hard
on understanding those
subjects
to secure
good
grades in the examination.
Sometimes
,
some
students
even lose interest in their
study
if they are not
allowed
to do any other extra activities except studying.
So
, there
must
be few extra
classes
for them to enjoy their day at
school
in spite of
all the tough
study
they
have to
do.
Not all
students
are interested
in
science
.
Some
of them might
be interested
in
music
or
arts
.
Also
,
some
students
can be
good
in both
science
and
music
or
arts
. Having
art
and
music
classes
help
them to actually bring out their hidden talent in front of the whole world.
Furthermore
, it will give them a chance to be creative.
In addition
, such
classes
help
students
to decrease the
stress
of
study
. This, in turn, will
help
them to
be focused
on their
study
since a
stress
-free mind can learn things
quickly
and
accurately
.
Similarly
, being in such
classes
not
only
help
students
to enjoy their day at
school
but
also
keep
them occupied during their free time.
Instead
of wasting their time in watching television and playing computer games, they can practice
music
and
art
and be creative. This way they will be entertaining themselves
as well
as
practising
and enhancing perfection on what they
love
.
To sum up,
classes
like
music
and
arts
are
really
important
for
students
. This should
be made
available in every
school
to motivate
students
in extra-curricular activities along with their
study
which will
help
them in their intellectual development.
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