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International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.8

International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. v. 8
Although International marketing is thought by some to be aggressive, other people consider that it develops and enriches the economy and culture of a country. While international marketing can demolish local business it also can increase the number of workplaces and offer more items at a lower price. In my opinion, a proliferation of international marketing is beneficial and it enables a country's development. On the one hand, international business can bring tough competition and small local companies might be unable to keep it. It leads to the impossibility to produce and sell local traditional masterpieces because made by little enterprises they have larger expenditures and, therefore, cost more expensive. Having lost such a craft, nationalities lose their own features and people forget their traditions. For example, nowadays all people around the world wear the same clothes which are manufactured by several famous brands and traditional costumes have become just memorises. On the other hand, widespread international markets brought different new products which are more technological and economic. For instance, when a couple of world technical brands came into Ukraine’s market and brought such various appliances as a washing machine, a dishwasher and microwave, people were amazed and excited to ease their housework. Moreover, if world supermarkets and other shops appear in the local market, they as big companies, raise an amount and types of workplaces, and, consequently, the incomes of citizens and their level of life are enhanced. In conclusion, while different people can have controversial points of view, I believe that international marketing strengthens people’s prosperity and provide modern achievements throughout all countries.
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consider that it develops and enriches the economy and culture of a country. While
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can demolish
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international
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is beneficial and it enables a country's development.

On the one hand,
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business can bring tough competition and
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small
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local
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companies
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keep
it. It leads to the impossibility to produce and sell
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local
traditional masterpieces
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because
made by
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little
enterprises they have larger expenditures and,
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own
features and
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forget their traditions.
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around the world wear the same clothes which
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brands and traditional costumes have become
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markets brought
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new products which are more technological and economic.
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, when a couple of world technical brands came into Ukraine’s market and brought such various appliances as a washing machine, a dishwasher and microwave,
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people
were amazed
and excited to
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ease
their housework.
Moreover
, if world supermarkets and other shops appear in the
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local
market, they as
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big
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companies
, raise an amount and types of workplaces, and,
consequently
, the incomes of citizens and their level of life
are enhanced
.

In conclusion
, while
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can have controversial points of view, I believe that
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international
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marketing
strengthens
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people’s
prosperity and provide modern achievements throughout all countries.
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IELTS essay International marketing is sometimes seen as invasive and an intrusion into the country in question. Others argue that it is a necessary and economical form of education in addition to spreading ideas, language and culture. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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