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Integrated speaking 6Using points and examples from the lecture, explain the kinds of loads an engineer must consider when building a structure. (source: Cambridge for TOEFL IBT 4th edition, Practice test 2) v.1

Integrated speaking 6Using points and examples from the lecture, explain the kinds of loads an engineer must consider when building a structure. (source: Cambridge for TOEFL IBT 4th edition, Practice test 2) v. 1
It is often advocated that to have a healthy diet people do not need to eat meat, so that it would be imperative to be vegetarian. This essay strongly disagrees with the given statement and will show why the human being has developed as omnivorous specie since ancient times. Humans need some types of protein that are only acquired by eating animal derived products. Therefore, eating meat, not necessarily red one, is the most convenient way to ingest such nutrients. Moreover, vegetables have minerals and vitamins, but in small levels, much smaller than the amount we need in order to keep healthy. For instance, by consuming beans, people are able to ingest iron, which is vital for the production of our red cells, however this grain has high levels of carbohydrates, which can lead to diabetes. Some people do not consume animal food because of cruelty imposed to those animals, which are raised to be people’s food. In those cases, consumption of animal products, such as eggs and milk, should be encouraged, especially those obtained in organic farms, because they are cruelty-free and they have all the necessary nutrients found in meat. As a result, people stop contributing to unscrupulous companies which commit animal abuse, without putting their lives at risk. In conclusion, to be fed with animal products is vital to grant the well-functioning of our bodies and to get rid of the feeling of cruelty, people should consume products obtained in organic venues, instead of become vegetarians, which could be a risk to their health.
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often
advocated that to have a healthy diet
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people
do not need to eat meat,
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so
that it would be imperative to be vegetarian. This essay
strongly
disagrees with the
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given
statement and will
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show
why the human being has developed as omnivorous specie since ancient times.

Humans need
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some
types of protein that are
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only
acquired by eating
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animal
derived
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products
.
Therefore
, eating meat, not
necessarily
red one, is the most convenient way to ingest such nutrients.
Moreover
, vegetables have minerals and vitamins,
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but
in
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small
levels, much smaller than the amount we need in order to
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keep
healthy.
For instance
, by consuming beans,
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people
are able to ingest iron, which is vital for the production of our red cells,
however
this grain has high levels of carbohydrates, which can lead to diabetes.

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Some
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people
do not consume
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animal
food
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because
of cruelty imposed to those
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animals
, which
are raised
to be
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people’s
food. In those cases, consumption of
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animal
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products
, such as eggs and milk, should
be encouraged
,
especially
those obtained in organic farms,
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because
they are
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cruelty-free and
they have all the necessary nutrients found in meat.
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,
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people
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stop
contributing to unscrupulous
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companies
which commit
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animal
abuse, without putting their
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lives
at
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risk
.

In conclusion
, to
be fed
with
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animal
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products
is vital to grant the well-functioning of our bodies and to
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get
rid of the feeling of cruelty,
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people
should consume
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products
obtained in organic venues,
instead
of become vegetarians, which could be a
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risk
to their health.
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IELTS essay Integrated speaking 6Using points and examples from the lecture, explain the kinds of loads an engineer must consider when building a structure. (source: Cambridge for TOEFL IBT 4th edition, Practice test 2) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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