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Inspite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? v.3

Inspite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? v. 3
The revolutionary development of technology in the field of agriculture has multiplied its production by many folds. Although technology had reached zenith in case of agriculture but there are some people around the globe who are still starving. The following essay will state the causes and provide solutions to the given problem. There are many reasons for people not receiving proper nutritious and healthy food. Firstly, the government is unable to provide basic necessities to its people due to corruption, not having enough funds or lack of responsibility. Secondly, improper distribution of food among the citizens of the nation as well as hoarding of goods by the rich people. Wastage of food in homes and restaurant is rising and this also accounts for the reason. In order to prevent starving of people around the world, the government should promote awareness programs in order to awareness among its citizens. This kind of programs or organizations will help the common man to understand the importance of food and prevent its wastage. This can also be done by placing posters on the walls of the restaurants and streets. Donations in the form of charity will also reduce the number of people who are facing this problem. The government should ban the hoarding of goods and should try to keep track on it by raiding potential hoarding sites. Ruling authorities should place their differences aside and fight together to overcome this problem. In conclusion, the problem of starvation can be eradicated by implementing the proposed solution as stated above. This problem is being faced by most of the underdeveloped nations, therefore, the developed nations should help the needy people.
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folds. Although technology had reached zenith in case of agriculture
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around the globe who are
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given
problem.

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many
reasons for
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people
not receiving proper nutritious and healthy
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food
.
Firstly
, the
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government
is unable to provide
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basic necessities
to its
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people
due to corruption, not having
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enough
funds or lack of responsibility.
Secondly
, improper distribution of
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food
among the citizens of the nation
as well
as hoarding of
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goods
by the rich
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people
. Wastage of
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food
in homes and restaurant is rising and this
also
accounts for the reason.

In order to
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prevent
starving of
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people
around the world, the
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government
should promote awareness programs in order to awareness among its citizens. This kind of programs or organizations will
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help
the common
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man
to understand the importance of
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food
and
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prevent
its wastage. This can
also
be done
by placing posters on the walls of the restaurants and streets. Donations in the form of charity will
also
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reduce
the number of
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people
who are facing this problem. The
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government
should ban the hoarding of
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goods
and should try to
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keep
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track
on it by raiding potential hoarding sites. Ruling authorities should place their differences aside and fight together to overcome this problem.

In conclusion
, the problem of starvation can
be eradicated
by implementing the proposed solution as stated above. This problem is
being faced
by most of the underdeveloped nations,
therefore
, the developed nations should
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help
the needy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Inspite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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