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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at l v.4

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages? Write at l v. 4
With the advancement in the internet and software allow us to work from home or any remote place. Although some people believe this change as negative growth for society and work culture, the benefits are far more superior for companies and employees as well. I strongly agree with this notion and will explain my views in further paragraphs. Earlier, for any official work, people had to be present in their office because of technological limitations such as poor internet connectivity, software access, and inadequate hardware. For instance, to resolve an issue on client site, company needed to deploy two employees, one at client location and another at base office location. Because of seamless internet connection and new invention of software, service provider can resolve a technical issue by talking remote access to the client laptops and PCs. Is it not a win-win situation for both parties – time-saving and prompt service? Moreover, work from home is possible because of improvement in information technology as we need only one laptop and internet to communicate with our client and project members. As this culture – work from home – is beneficial for both employee and employers, many organisations are promoting this culture. For example, running cost of company will get reduced because of minimal electricity usages. At the same time, employee can give time to their family, which lead to a job satisfaction. However, no one can deny the fact that the team bonding of a team will get stronger if team member meet frequently and share their thoughts in a formal live gathering, which is not at all possible in virtual gathering like video conferencing. As a result, attachment towards office and colleagues are reduced these days. Secondly, employee may not be serious about his work as there is no one to look after him, while working from home. To sum up, even though there are few demerits of information technology such as poor bonding in team, reduced seriousness about jobs, the merits have definitely outnumbered negatives as cost reduction and employee satisfaction are the two top most priority for any organisation.
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from home or any remote place. Although
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people
believe this
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change
as
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negative
growth for society and
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work
culture, the benefits are far more superior for
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companies
and
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employees
as well
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strongly
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agree
with this notion and will
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explain
my views in
further
paragraphs.

Earlier, for any official
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work
,
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people
had to be present in their office
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because
of technological limitations such as poor internet connectivity, software access, and inadequate hardware.
For instance
, to resolve an issue on
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client
site,
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company
needed to deploy two
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employees
, one at
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client
location and another at base office location.
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Because
of seamless internet connection and new invention of software, service provider can resolve a technical issue by talking remote access to the
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client
laptops and PCs. Is it not a win-win situation for both parties
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–
time-saving and prompt service?
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,
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work
from home is possible
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because
of improvement in information technology as we need
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only
one laptop and internet to communicate with our
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client
and project members. As this culture
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–
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work
from home
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–
is beneficial for both
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employee
and employers,
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many
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organisations
are promoting this culture.
For example
, running cost of
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company
will
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get
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reduced
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of minimal electricity usages. At the same time,
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employee
can give time to their family, which lead to a job satisfaction.

However
, no one can deny the fact that the
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team
bonding of a
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team
will
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get
stronger if
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team
member
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meet
frequently
and share their thoughts in a formal
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live
gathering, which is not at all possible in virtual gathering like video conferencing.
As a result
, attachment towards office and colleagues are
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reduced
these days.
Secondly
,
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employee
may not be serious about his
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work
as there is no one to look after him, while working from home.

To sum up,
even though
there are few demerits of information technology such as poor bonding in
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team
,
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reduced
seriousness about jobs, the merits have definitely outnumbered negatives as cost reduction and
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employee
satisfaction are the two top most priority for any
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages? Write at l v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
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