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Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society. v.1

Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society. v. 1
In many countries, laws are quite flexible to let ordinary individuals carry firearms while in many other countries it is quite hard to get a license, even for a notable person, to own a gun. It is often said that when a state or country allows its citizens to carry weapons, the crime and violence rates increase there and I quite agree with this statement. First, guns are meant to shot someone either to wound or kill him. Thus the very objective of a gun is to kill a person and thus this deathly weapon can only increase the crime and violence in a society. To understand how the mass ownership of guns can increase the violence in a country we can compare a country like the USA, where carrying a gun is allowed, with a country like Japan, where it is restricted. In 2014, when the United States experienced over 18, 000 gun-related homicides, Japan had only 14 and this is quite an alarming comparison that reveals how firearms ownership by mass people can increase violence in a country. Second, research indicates that owning and carrying a gun can psychologically affect our behaviours and thus people often commit crimes only because they have guns with them. Thus letting people carry guns puts others life in risk rather than ensuring safety. Accidental, psychological, and family violence gunshot wounds and death are quite high in many countries, especially where people can carry guns with them, and the only way to reduce such crime rate is to restrict the ownership of guns. In conclusion, the only reason the authority would permit someone to carry a gun is to ensure the safety of this person. However, the reality is quite contrary and allowing people to carry guns is actually letting criminals also won it. Thus there is no doubt that people in a country should not be allowed to carry firearms and restricting it would significantly decrease the crime and violence.
In
many
countries
, laws are
quite
flexible to
let
ordinary individuals
carry
firearms while in
many
other
countries
it is
quite
hard
to
get
a license, even for a notable person, to
own
a
gun
. It is
often
said that when a state or
country
allows
its citizens to
carry
weapons, the
crime
and
violence
rates
increase
there and I
quite
agree
with this statement.

First
,
guns
are meant
to shot someone either to wound or kill him.
Thus
the
very
objective of a
gun
is to kill a person and
thus
this deathly weapon can
only
increase
the
crime
and
violence
in a society. To understand how the mass ownership of
guns
can
increase
the
violence
in a
country
we can compare a
country
like the USA, where carrying a
gun
is
allowed
, with a
country
like Japan, where it
is restricted
. In 2014, when the United States experienced over 18, 000 gun-related homicides, Japan had
only
14 and this is
quite
an alarming comparison that reveals how firearms ownership by mass
people
can
increase
violence
in a country.

Second, research indicates that owning and carrying a
gun
can
psychologically
affect our
behaviours
and
thus
people
often
commit
crimes
only
because
they have
guns
with them.
Thus
letting
people
carry
guns
puts others life in
risk
rather
than ensuring safety. Accidental, psychological, and family
violence
gunshot wounds and death are
quite
high in
many
countries
,
especially
where
people
can
carry
guns
with them, and the
only
way to
reduce
such
crime
rate is to restrict the ownership of guns.

In conclusion
, the
only
reason the authority would permit someone to
carry
a
gun
is to ensure the safety of this person.
However
, the reality is
quite
contrary and allowing
people
to
carry
guns
is actually letting criminals
also
won it.
Thus
there is no doubt that
people
in a
country
should not be
allowed
to
carry
firearms and restricting it would
significantly
decrease the
crime
and
violence
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
63Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.0
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