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Capital punishment is essential to control crime and violence in the society. Without enforcing capital punishment like death penalty out life would become less secure and the number of crime and violence in the society would increase. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Capital punishment is essential to control crime and violence in the society. Without enforcing capital punishment like death penalty out life would become less secure and the number of crime and violence in the society would increase. v. 1
It is believed that capital punishment is significant in order to restrict criminal events in the society. When lack of serious precautions assures violence would increase in same way safety would be in danger all around the cities. I completely disagree with this fine because of some reasons which I will elaborate in these below paragraphs. In the past and now, the rate of crime has been rising dramatically. To diminish it, capital punishment is undeniable advised by some authorities. Meanwhile, many people support it to live safe and secure in their neighbourhood. For example, in last decade, a local company survey showed that the cities which had capital punishment had been more secure and social standards, also schools had been in a good level not only safety, comfortable also people's happiness. That is to say, when people think about criminal sentence a fine isolated from society during their all life, the crucial solution is occurring. Therefore, individuals feel they can inhibited physical violence, murdering or even rape. On the other hand, everybody can deserve to stay alive, even if a murder. In the other words, all human, organism has a great creation, nobody should not die from his or her past. They can handle with their consequences of faults. If a person has given one more change, everything would change in a good way. For instance, a story from a small town has shown that theory can be accurate sometimes, a man forgiven and redeem has altered and found a foundation of a charity. Then, that charity foundation has famous and global. They can sign and managed great companies all around the world. In conclusion, I restate that it may be an accurate way to sentence fine, however it should be fair. I firmly disagree with capital punishments because of every life is special, spiritual even if a criminal. In the last words, a guilty person can forgiven supporting by the society.
It
is believed
that
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capital
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punishment
is significant in order to restrict criminal
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events
in the society.
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When
lack of serious precautions assures violence would increase in same way safety would be in
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danger
all around the cities. I completely disagree with this fine
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because
of
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some
reasons which I will elaborate in these below paragraphs.

In the past and
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now
, the rate of crime has been rising
dramatically
. To diminish it,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
capital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
punishment
is undeniable advised by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
authorities. Meanwhile,
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
support it to
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live
safe and secure in their
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neighbourhood
.
For example
, in last decade, a local
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company
survey
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showed
that the cities which had
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capital
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punishment
had been more secure and social standards,
also
schools had been in a
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good
level not
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only
safety, comfortable
also
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people
's happiness.
That is
to say, when
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people
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think
about criminal sentence a fine isolated from society during their all life, the crucial solution is occurring.
Therefore
, individuals feel they can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "inhibit"
inhibited
physical violence, murdering or even rape.

On the other hand
, everybody can deserve to stay alive, even if a murder. In the other words, all human, organism has a great creation, nobody should not
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die
from
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his or her
past. They can handle with their consequences of faults. If a person has
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given
one more
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change
, everything would
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change
in a
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good
way.
For instance
, a story from a
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small
town has shown that theory can be accurate
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sometimes
, a
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man
forgiven and redeem has altered and found a foundation of a charity. Then, that charity foundation has
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famous
and global. They can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
and managed great
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companies
all around the world.

In conclusion
, I restate that it may be an accurate way to sentence fine,
however
it should be
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fair
. I
firmly
disagree with
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capital
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punishments
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because
of every life is special, spiritual even if a criminal. In the last words, a guilty person can
Did you mean "forgive" or "be forgiven"?
forgiven
supporting by the society.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Capital punishment is essential to control crime and violence in the society. Without enforcing capital punishment like death penalty out life would become less secure and the number of crime and violence in the society would increase. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6.5
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