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Increase in the price of petrol is the best way to solve the traffic jams and pollution problem. To the what extent you agree or disagree with this statement. What other measures can be taken to solve traffic problem and pollution problem v.1

Increase in the price of petrol is the best way to solve the traffic jams and pollution problem. To the what extent you agree or disagree with this statement. What other measures can be taken to solve traffic problem and pollution problem v. 1
Traffic and pollution are a growing problem in most major countries around the world. Some propose that raising petrol price is the best way to solve these problems. However, I disagree. This essay will explain why and also suggest some other ways to minimise congestion and pollution. I do not believe that making petrol more expensive for motorists will reduce the amount of cars on the road. This is a weak deterrent for people because drivers are used with incremental increases in petrol costs. Fuel price regularly goes up and down due to international affairs and people still drive their cars regardless of the cost. Therefore, I do not think it is an effective method in solving environmental problems that results from traffic. I do, however, believe that there are other methods that be more effective. Firstly, there needs to be alternative forms of transport in big cities, like Melbourne, have instituted initiatives like public bike sharing. This encourages people to ride rather than drive. Another solution is to make public transport accessible in all areas. Again, in Melbourne, most neighbourhoods have a train station or tram access, but many do not. Building public transport in more areas will provide more opportunities for people to choose not to drive. Overall, raising the cost of fuel will not deter people from driving. I believe, the best way to decrease traffic and reduce pollution is to provide alternative forms of transport and provide access to public transport that do not currently have it.
Traffic and pollution are a growing problem in most major countries around the world.
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Some
propose that raising petrol price is the best way to solve these problems.
However
, I disagree. This essay will
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explain
why and
also
suggest
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some
other ways to
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minimise
congestion and pollution.

I do not believe that making petrol more expensive for motorists will
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reduce
the amount of cars on the road. This is a weak deterrent for
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people
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because
drivers are
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used
with incremental increases in petrol costs. Fuel price
regularly
goes up and down due to international affairs and
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people
still
drive their cars regardless of the cost.
Therefore
, I do not
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think
it is an effective method in solving environmental problems that results from traffic.

I do,
however
, believe that there are other methods that be more effective.
Firstly
, there needs to be alternative forms of
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transport
in
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big
cities, like Melbourne, have instituted initiatives like
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public
bike sharing. This encourages
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people
to ride
rather
than drive. Another solution is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
accessible in all areas. Again, in Melbourne, most
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbourhoods' is British English.
neighbourhoods
have a train station or tram access,
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but
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many
do not. Building
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public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
in more areas will provide more opportunities for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to choose not to drive.

Overall
, raising the cost of fuel will not deter
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from driving. I believe, the best way to decrease traffic and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
pollution is to provide alternative forms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
and provide access to
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public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
that do not
currently
have it.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increase in the price of petrol is the best way to solve the traffic jams and pollution problem. To the what extent you agree or disagree with this statement. What other measures can be taken to solve traffic problem and pollution problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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