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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.2

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 2
Today, there are many challenges in front of humankind, which need to be sold by hook or crook. Out of many, two problems are growing number of vehicles on roads and air quality control are raised due to increase in population. I do not agree with the given opinion about the hike in the price of petrol as, it is not the only one option to solve these issues. On the other hand, intense use of public transportation and strict rules about pollution control are also effective to limit traffic and harmful gases in the air. First of all, vehicles on the road is directly proportional to the population and inversely depends on infrastructure expansion like roads and flyovers. in addition to this, if efficient public transport can be built by government then most of public use that for the daily transportation. In such case, private vehicles will be reduced on the road which will positively affect the both challenges. Along with frequency of buses or trains, comfort and speed should be raised to attract more passengers. Secondly, the pollution can be controlled by efficient engines of vehicles and little bit awareness about use of it. The government has implemented the policy to check exhaust guess by PUC certificate for all types of vehicles which make sure about the efficiency of the engine. However, personal vehicle cannot be reduced to zero, but some precautions like turn off vehicles at traffic light and sharing of cars among colleagues are few basic cares which can help to limit pollution level. All in all, increase in uses of mass transportation in advancement in vehicle along with infrastructure is effective to control traffic and pollution. As, increase in the cost of oil also returned with a boost in cost of daily routine which might be not affordable for lower middle-class families.
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Today
, there are
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many
challenges in front of humankind, which need to
be sold
by hook or crook. Out of
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many
, two problems are growing number of
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vehicles
on
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roads
and air quality control
are raised
due to increase in population. I do not
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agree
with the
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given
opinion about the hike in the price of petrol as, it is not the
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only
one option to solve these issues.
On the other hand
, intense
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use
of public transportation and strict
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rules
about
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pollution
control are
also
effective to limit traffic and harmful gases in the air.

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First of all
,
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vehicles
on the
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road
is
directly
proportional to the population and
inversely
depends on infrastructure expansion like
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roads
and flyovers.
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in
addition to this, if efficient public transport can
be built
by
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government
then most of public
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use
that for the daily transportation. In such case, private
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vehicles
will be
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reduced
on the
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road
which will
positively
affect the both challenges. Along with frequency of buses or trains, comfort and speed should
be raised
to attract more passengers.

Secondly
, the
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pollution
can
be controlled
by efficient engines of
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vehicles
and
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
awareness about
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use
of it. The
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government
has implemented the policy to
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check
exhaust guess by PUC certificate for all types of
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vehicles
which
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make
sure about the efficiency of the engine.
However
, personal
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vehicle
cannot be
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reduced
to zero,
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but
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some
precautions like turn off
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vehicles
at traffic light and sharing of cars among colleagues are few basic cares which can
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help
to limit
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pollution
level.

All in all, increase in
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uses
of mass transportation in advancement in
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vehicle
along with infrastructure is effective to control traffic and
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pollution
. As, increase in the cost of oil
also
returned with a boost in cost of daily routine which might be not affordable for lower middle-
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class
families.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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