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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.3

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 3
Road congestion and air pollution are the repercussion of higher vehicles on the road. Hence, some believe that raising the fuel's price will stop both issues immediately. In my opinion, I believe that it can effectively stop both matters, along with imposing higher tax to vehicles and reducing the cost of public transportation to solve the traffic and pollution issues. Raising petrol price, in my view, can encourage citizens to use alternative transportation such as busses and trains. Therefore, as car or motorcycle users are dwindling, road traffic and pollution will simultaneously decrease. For instance, in developed countries, public transportations users often overcome private vehicles due to the expensive fuel cost. If they did not increase the fuel's price, it will be unlikely to solve road congestion and air pollution issues. While increasing the price might be useful, there are other elements that can be taken into account. Firstly, is to add higher taxes to road users. This is because of the fact that when the cost of vehicles is rising, the demand will decrease. A cigarette levy, for example, has been significantly proven to reduce the sales of tobacco in Singapore. Furthermore, lowering the public transportation fees will persuade citizens to use less car or motorcycle on the road. In conclusion, in my opinion, I believe that increasing the price can help to stop the growing traffic and air pollution on the road. Additionally, introducing higher tax and decreasing public transportation's cost are other factors that need to be considered in order to solve both issues immediately.
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are the repercussion of higher
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on the
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.
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believe that raising the fuel's
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both issues immediately. In my opinion, I believe that it can
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stop
both matters, along with imposing higher tax to
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vehicles
and reducing the
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cost
of
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public
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transportation
to solve the traffic and
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pollution
issues.

Raising petrol
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price
, in my view, can encourage citizens to
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use
alternative
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transportation
such as busses and trains.
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, as car or motorcycle users are dwindling,
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road
traffic and
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pollution
will
simultaneously
decrease.
For instance
, in
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developed countries
,
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public
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transportations
users
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overcome private
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vehicles
due to the expensive fuel
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cost
. If they did not increase the fuel's
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price
, it will be unlikely to solve
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road
congestion and air
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pollution
issues.

While increasing the
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price
might be useful, there are other elements that can
be taken
into account.
Firstly
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higher taxes to
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users. This is
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when the
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cost
of
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vehicles
is rising, the demand will decrease. A cigarette levy,
for example
, has been
significantly
proven to
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reduce
the sales of tobacco in Singapore.
Furthermore
, lowering the
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public
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transportation
fees will persuade citizens to
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use
less car or motorcycle on the road.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, I believe that increasing the
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price
can
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help
to
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stop
the growing traffic and air
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pollution
on the
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road
.
Additionally
, introducing higher tax and decreasing
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public
transportation's
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cost
are other factors that need to
be considered
in order to solve both issues immediately.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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