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In your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars? v.3

In your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars? v. 3
From my point of view, it is undeniably essential to keep our globe safe from greenhouse gases. It is evident that cars or any gas-fueled vehicle produce these harmful gases. Something has to be done to prevent greenhouse effect and using electric cars could be a good way of preventing it. It can be clearly seen that gas-fueled vehicles comprise the majority of the causes of the greenhouse effect. Today, developers have discovered new electric cars that have adequate speed and are equally comfortable. Once these new, innovative cars have been fully charged, it can travel long distances with moderate speed. In spite of these cars are slightly expensive, they are undoubtedly prominent for both our health and our planet's safety. So some incentive measures to make people embrace electric cars should have taken. For this reason, people have to be introduced about how perilous these gas-fueled vehicles are. In this case, governments have a great deal of responsibility to get over that. For instance, the advertisement boards on the side of the roads are one of the optimal places to inform people. In addition, social networks or TVs could introduce the aspects of the electric cars. Furthermore, petrol is diminishing with a great acceleration. Consequently, petrol has a limited source, despite electric energy is unlimited that they can be obtained by solar or wind power. In addition, electric energy has limited wastages, but gas has a lot of wastes and one of these wastes is a threat to our lives. The government can fund the car producers to produce cheap electric cars and transportations. Less tax on electric cars could also be an effective solution as it would arrest more people to purchase them. To sum up, gas-fueled cars have a lot of drawbacks in terms of its fumes and environmental damage, although there is no marked disadvantage that can threaten our lives in electric cars. Funding, less tax and advertisement can attract more people to use this sort of cars.
From my point of view, it is
undeniably
essential to
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keep
our globe safe from greenhouse gases. It is evident that
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cars
or any gas-fueled vehicle produce these harmful gases. Something
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has to
be done
to
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prevent
greenhouse effect and using
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electric
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cars
could be a
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good
way of preventing it.

It can be
clearly
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seen
that gas-fueled vehicles comprise the majority of the causes of the greenhouse effect.
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Today
, developers have discovered new
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electric
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cars
that have adequate speed and are
equally
comfortable. Once these new, innovative
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cars
have been
fully
charged, it can travel long distances with moderate speed.
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In spite of
these
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cars
are
slightly
expensive, they are
undoubtedly
prominent for both our health and our planet's safety.
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So
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some
incentive measures to
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make
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people
embrace
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electric
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cars
should have taken.
For this reason
,
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people
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have to
be introduced
about how perilous these gas-fueled vehicles are.
In this case
,
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governments
have a great deal of responsibility to
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get
over that.
For instance
, the advertisement boards on the side of the roads are one of the optimal places to inform
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people
.
In addition
, social networks or TVs could introduce the aspects of the
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electric
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cars
.
Furthermore
, petrol is diminishing with a great acceleration.
Consequently
, petrol has a limited source, despite
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electric
energy
is unlimited
that they can
be obtained
by solar or wind power.
In addition
,
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electric
energy has limited
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wastages
,
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but
gas has
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a lot of
wastes and one of these wastes is a threat to our
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lives
.

The
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government
can fund the
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car
producers to produce
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cheap
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electric
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cars
and transportations. Less tax on
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electric
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cars
could
also
be an effective solution as it would arrest more
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people
to
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purchase
them.

To sum up, gas-fueled
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cars
have
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a lot of
drawbacks in terms of its fumes and environmental damage, although there is no marked disadvantage that can threaten our
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lives
in
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electric
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cars
. Funding, less tax and advertisement can attract more
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people
to
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use
this sort of
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cars
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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