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In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? v.2

In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? v. 2
From my point of view, new discoveries cannot be limited; in particular, new innovative technological devices have increased and being developed every day. Transportation is one of the most important discoveries in the world and has made it possible to have a modern world. In my opinion train is the most significant innovation in the past 2 centuries in the transportation field. Transportation has been a prominent part of humankind and the demand for new and more comfortable vehicles made people discover life-enhancing transportation innovations. Over the past 200 years, transportation has been reformed from ordinary trains to more complicated and developed magnetic trains. In my opinion, all vehicles such as cars, trains, airplanes or ships have their own importance for people. Consequently, cars are undoubtedly predominant in our daily life as these vehicles are comfortable and have adequate speed. Plains or ships comprise the majority in the transportation of loads. Furthermore, travelling to short-distanced places is more optimal by trains. So, those vehicles are specialised in particular areas. From my perspective, the most remarkable transportation vehicle which is has specialised in its area is the train. In particular, fast trains of modern days. These trains have been discovered by Chinese engineers and are spreading around the world and are being utilised by many other countries. The advantage of these trains is that they are too fast. Also, it can be clearly understood from its name which is ‘fast train’. That train's speed makes it easier to travel between places without wasting time. And developers are trying to discover a new magnetic train which can travel faster in the future. To sum up, humankind was always in search for new innovations and transportation discoveries have changed over the past 2 centuries and fast trains are the most significant innovations in my opinion.
From my point of view,
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new
discoveries cannot
be limited
;
in particular
,
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new
innovative technological devices have increased and
being developed
every day.
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Transportation
is one of the most
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important
discoveries in the world and has made it possible to have a modern world. In my opinion
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train
is the most significant
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innovation
in the past 2 centuries in the
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transportation
field.

Transportation has been a prominent part of humankind and the demand for
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new
and more comfortable
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vehicles
made
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people
discover life-enhancing
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transportation
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innovations
. Over the past 200 years,
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transportation
has
been reformed
from ordinary
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trains
to more complicated and developed magnetic
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trains
. In my opinion, all
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vehicles
such as cars,
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trains
, airplanes or ships have their
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own
importance for
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people
.
Consequently
, cars are
undoubtedly
predominant in our daily life as these
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vehicles
are comfortable and have adequate speed. Plains or ships comprise the majority in the
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transportation
of loads.
Furthermore
, travelling to short-distanced places is more optimal by
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trains
.
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So
, those
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vehicles
are
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specialised
in particular
areas.

From my perspective, the most remarkable
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transportation
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vehicle
which is has
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specialised
in its area is the
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train
.
In particular
,
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fast
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trains
of modern days. These
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trains
have
been discovered
by Chinese engineers and are spreading around the world and are being
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utilised
by
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many
other countries. The advantage of these
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trains
is that they are too
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fast
.
Also
, it can be
clearly
understood from its name which is ‘
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fast
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train’
. That train's speed
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makes
it easier to travel between places without wasting time. And developers are trying to discover a
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new
magnetic
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train
which can travel faster in the future.

To sum up, humankind was always in search for
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new
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innovations
and
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transportation
discoveries have
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changed
over the past 2 centuries and
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fast
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trains
are the most significant
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innovations
in my opinion.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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