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In your opinion, what are the characteristics of a good son or daughter in a family? Use specific examples and details to explain your answer. v.1

In your opinion, what are the characteristics of a good son or daughter in a family? Use specific examples and details to explain your answer. v. 1
Since the first car appeared in Britain in 1888, the world as changed, and the car ownership has increased significantly and in 2000 the number of vehicles on British roads was around 29 million. Cars are considered as essential for people’s independence and this is because people work far away from their homes, and they often need to go to the city for different reasons such as going to the shops or buying goods for the month. But people also use their cars to travel small distances when they clearly could do that distance by walking. And this brings us to a bigger problem which is the harmful gas emission which causes air pollution, so we should find alternative forms of transport. To fight this, governments should encourage people to use public transportation like trains or buses. This way they would fight traffic problems because there would be less cars circulating. To encourage people to use public transports, governments should lower the transportation fees and create more schedules, so everyone could be able to use these transports, and limit the number of vehicles which could circulate in the cities during the day like they do in Athens. There should be also an obligation to get our cars checked to look for the levels of gas emission and the cars which produced high levels of harmful gases should be prohibited of circulating and people whom were caught riding one of these cars should be fined. People should also be encouraged to walk and to ride a bicycle more often to do smaller distances. In conclusion, I truly believe that we should find alternative ways of transportation and governments should create international laws to control car ownership and use, because there are air pollution problems associated both with the car production industry and the car usage Governments should also make laws to control the production of cars and make cheaper alternative ways, like electric cars or biodiesel cars, by banning the production of cars powered by diesel and gasoline.
Since the
first
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car
appeared in Britain in 1888, the world as
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changed
, and the
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car
ownership has increased
significantly
and in 2000 the number of vehicles on British roads was around 29 million.

Cars
are considered
as essential for
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people’s
independence and this is
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because
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people
work far away from their homes, and they
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often
need to go to the city for
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different
reasons such as going to the shops or buying
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goods
for the month.
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But
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people
also
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use
their
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cars
to travel
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small
distances when they
clearly
could do that distance by walking. And this brings us to a bigger problem which is the harmful gas emission which causes air pollution,
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so
we should find alternative forms of transport.

To fight this,
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governments
should encourage
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people
to
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use
public transportation like trains or buses. This way they would fight traffic problems
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because
there would be
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less
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cars
circulating. To encourage
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people
to
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use
public transports,
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governments
should lower the transportation fees and create more schedules,
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so
everyone could be able to
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use
these transports, and limit the number of vehicles which could circulate in the cities during the day like they do in Athens. There should be
also
an obligation to
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get
our
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cars
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checked
to look for the levels of gas emission and the
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cars
which produced high levels of harmful gases should
be prohibited
of circulating and
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people
whom
were caught
riding one of these
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cars
should
be fined
.
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People
should
also
be encouraged
to walk and to ride a bicycle more
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often
to do smaller distances.

In conclusion
, I
truly
believe that we should find alternative ways of transportation and
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governments
should create international laws to control
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car
ownership and
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use
,
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because
there are air pollution problems associated both with the
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car
production industry and the
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car
usage
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Governments
should
also
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make
laws to control the production of
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cars
and
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make
cheaper alternative ways, like electric
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cars
or biodiesel
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cars
, by banning the production of
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cars
powered by diesel and gasoline.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In your opinion, what are the characteristics of a good son or daughter in a family? Use specific examples and details to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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