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Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. v. 1
The government has a responsibility to improve the living conditions for its citizens. But not every country has the ability to do. When a country is stricken by poverty, should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations? I believe that richer nations are not obliged to share their wealth among poorer nations and they have right whether they want to donate or not. To begin, we all belong to one mankind. Every person has right to have educations and to live in a good condition. There are many countries who are confronting the problems such as war, famine, drought, flood, lack of food and education system. For instance, in Africa hundreds and thousand of people are living without enough food and education system. But the governments couldn't take action against poverty and starvation because they don't have ample amount of money to build a suitable education system and resources to provide food. In such occasions, there is no way of improving without the help of other nations. They will become poorer and poorer. And as a result, the poorer nations will be wiped away from this planet. On the other hand, giving poor nations food and resources without getting anything in return will remove any motivation for them to develop and they will get used to being helped. They are obliged to look after its citizens, because they are independent countries. Also, donating food and basic need to poorer nations, is not considered as a real help. All of these can be easily used up in a short period of time, instead they should help poor nations with technology and expert skills. A combination of technology and trained generation can build up the long term economic status of the country. To conclude, richer nations are not responsible for helping poorer nations, its their preferences.
The
government
has a responsibility to
improve
the living conditions for its citizens.
But
not every
country
has the ability to do. When a
country
is stricken by poverty, should wealthy
nations
be required
to share their wealth among
poorer
nations
? I believe that richer
nations
are not obliged to share their wealth among
poorer
nations and
they have right whether they want to donate or not.

To
begin
, we all belong to one mankind. Every person has right to have
educations
and to
live
in a
good
condition. There are
many
countries
who are confronting the problems such as war, famine, drought, flood, lack of
food
and
education
system.
For instance
, in Africa hundreds and
thousand
of
people
are living without
enough
food
and
education
system.
But
the
governments
couldn't take action against poverty and starvation
because
they don't have ample amount of money to build a suitable
education
system and resources to provide
food
. In such occasions, there is no way of improving without the
help
of other
nations
. They will become
poorer
and
poorer
. And
as a result
, the
poorer
nations
will
be wiped
away from this planet.

On the other hand
, giving poor
nations
food
and resources without getting anything in return will remove any motivation for them to
develop and
they will
get
used
to being
helped
. They
are obliged
to look after its citizens,
because
they are independent
countries
.
Also
, donating
food
and basic need to
poorer
nations
, is not considered as a real
help
. All of these can be
easily
used
up in a short period of time,
instead
they should
help
poor
nations
with technology and expert
skills
. A combination of technology and trained generation can build up the long term economic status of the country.

To conclude
, richer
nations
are not responsible for helping
poorer
nations
,
its
their preferences.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
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