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In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its naturalcondition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing andindustry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its naturalcondition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing andindustry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
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Infants are
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the a
bless from god, and we
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have to
bring them up
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in a perfect way
.
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Some
educators believe that they should spend their free
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time
with education beside curriculum that they
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get
at school. In my opinion, they ought to have fun with education
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because
they can gain knowledge too from playing or watching cartoon movies and series such as Ben 10. In the following lines, through presentation of my
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perespective
will
be discussed
below with
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given
examples.

To
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begin
with, practicing sports activities can boost their fitness and
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makes
them
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open minded
. It
also
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makes
them sociable.
For example
, being in a team gives them the essential confidence to deal with friend and
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improves
their teamwork
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skills
. The Guardian has published a recent research that 70% of youngsters who practice sport from an early period of
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time
become more
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successfull
in their school. This instance,
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shows
that
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lesiure
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time
can be
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positive
for them.

In addition
, if they
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learnt
how to create since they are younger, that will give them a
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criterea
to
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think
differently
. To illustrate, when the child learns how to draw or paint early, this can give him the sense of criticism. There is a survey conducted by Cairo University
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shows
that about 75% of infants who have talents are more effective in society.
Thus
, this
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makes
it
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clear
that they
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must
have other
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skills
beside studying science and
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maths
and other materials that they
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get
at school.

In conclusion
, having presented the
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ideas
above, it may
be stated
that it is a right for every infant to have
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time
for passion and fun. I believe that they can become more creative and independent.
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IELTS essay In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its naturalcondition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing andindustry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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