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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended o v.1

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended o v. 1
Generally, the pursuit of knowledge is a concept that is valued by most cultures. In the 21st century, we now have more options regarding how we search for knowledge, hence the reason why people travel to a foreign land to acquire education. If you are a French National you can apply to the USA to study Engineering likewise a USA citizen can apply to China to take a course in linguistics. In fact, most Universities across the globe now have a greater proportion of foreign students. Certainly, there are numerous benefits that can be derived from studying abroad. Many students choose a particular Institution because of its reputation they possess. For instance, Cambridge University holds excellent goodwill and it is believed by many that if a student, graduate from such an establishment will increase the chances of securing a decent position in a company back home. Another point is that it broadens the students' networks. It has an opportunity to meet people from different countries and it makes them create a lasting relationship that will be a great advantage in the future. Furthermore, living far apart from friends and family builds student independence and self-sufficient skills Unfortunately, the experience e of studying abroad is not always positive. Research has shown that 20% of student learning abroad usually strong to adapt to a new environment due to language and culture. Hence, the sometimes always feel homesick because they don't have like minds to communicate with. Also, the tuition fee is quite enormous for both parents and student and this might require to do part-time work in order to foot part of the bill. As a result of this, the student may over stress themselves, which might have a negative effect on their grades. Finally, the learning and teaching approach in abroad might be an unwelcome surprise to some students. In summary, the key approach to an effective learning foreign institution is to be open-minded in order to fully enjoy the benefits of such an environment will bring.
Generally
, the pursuit of knowledge is a concept that
is valued
by most cultures. In the 21st century, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
have more options regarding how we search for knowledge,
hence
the reason why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
travel to a foreign land to acquire education.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you are a French National you can apply to the USA to study Engineering
likewise
a USA citizen can apply to China to take a course in linguistics. In fact, most Universities across the globe
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
have a greater proportion of foreign students.

Certainly
, there are numerous benefits that can
be derived
from studying
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abroad
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
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students
choose a particular Institution
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its reputation they possess.
For instance
, Cambridge University holds excellent goodwill and it
is believed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
that if a
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student
, graduate from such an establishment will increase the chances of securing a decent position in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
back home. Another point is that it broadens the students' networks. It has an opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
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people
from
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different
countries and it
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makes
them create a lasting relationship that will be a great advantage in the future.
Furthermore
, living far apart from friends and family builds
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student
independence and self-sufficient
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills


Unfortunately, the experience e of studying
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abroad
is not always
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positive
. Research has shown that 20% of
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student
learning
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abroad
usually
strong to adapt to a new environment due to language and culture.
Hence
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
always feel homesick
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because
they don't have like minds to communicate with.
Also
, the tuition fee is quite enormous for both parents and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
and this might require
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to do
part-time work in order to foot part of the bill.
As a result
of this, the
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student
may over
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
themselves, which might have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on their grades.
Finally
, the learning and teaching approach in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
might be an unwelcome surprise to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
students.

In summary, the key approach to an effective learning foreign institution is to be open-minded in order to
fully
enjoy the benefits of such an environment will bring.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended o v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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