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some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages the disadvantages v.7

some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages the disadvantages v. 7
It is being argued that most of the companies keep contacting their employees after the core business hours, and even on holidays as well, which in turn result was devastating of their personal space and their respective member's time. Though, it's only acceptable for some emergency cases, however its not recommended by the governments as well due to various reasons. Firstly, by calling for the employees mobile numbers on vacations, employees won't able to spend their time satisfactorily. For instance, consider the blue-collar worker who went to his wedding for a month, irrespective of their actual need contacting him/her is actually disturbing his valuable and precious time. Last year, the times magazine published an article about the employee regulatory act, in which it’s been clearly stated that there are unavoidable punishments for the firms by contacting their workmen whoever on vacation or off for the specific period. Secondly, the reason to get off for working environment for a time period is to work more proactively and to take care of their respective company projects more efficiently in order to boost their market which in turn result in their shares. Considering calling them, even on the employee sick day it significantly gives a negative effect on the company. Apparently people will lose their serenity and calm nature. In addition to that, At times an artisan will be panic suddenly by their management calls and even by their e-mails. As a result, it will lead to major mental health issues which will further impact potential for their career growth. Consider last decade, reports by a local newspaper Almost 30% of people has got the heart attack by attempting the office calls when they are on leave and most of them are related to their financial reasons such as employee market shares and their alternative investments. To Conclude that, it's not advised to contact their respective worker while they in their family time and long holidays even not to send the personal messages to them. Governments have already in place by certain amendments for the companies. Of course they are failing in execution of those rules. In order to minimize the public death the companies should follow those stringent policies.
It is
being argued
that most of the
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companies
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keep
contacting their
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employees
after the core business hours, and even on holidays
as well
, which in turn result was devastating of their personal space and their respective member's
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time
. Though, it's
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only
acceptable for
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some
emergency cases,
however
its not recommended by the
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governments
as well
due to various reasons.

Firstly
, by calling for the
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employees
mobile numbers on vacations,
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employees
won't able to spend their
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time
satisfactorily
.
For instance
, consider the blue-collar worker who went to his wedding for a month, irrespective of their actual need contacting him/her is actually disturbing his valuable and precious
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time
. Last year, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
times
magazine published an article about the
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employee
regulatory act, in which it’s been
clearly
stated that there are unavoidable punishments for the firms by contacting their workmen whoever on vacation or off for the specific period.
Secondly
, the reason to
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get
off for working environment for a
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time
period is to work more
proactively
and to take care of their respective
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company
projects more
efficiently
in order to boost their market which in turn result in their shares. Considering calling them, even on the
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employee
sick day it
significantly
gives a
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negative
effect on the
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company
.
Apparently
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people
will lose their serenity and calm nature.

In addition
to that, At
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times
an artisan will be panic
suddenly
by their management calls and even by their e-mails.
As a result
, it will lead to major mental health issues which will
further
impact potential for their career growth. Consider last decade, reports by a local newspaper Almost 30% of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
has
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got
the heart attack by attempting the office calls when they are on
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leave
and most of them
are related
to their financial reasons such as
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employee
market shares and their alternative investments.

To Conclude
that, it's not advised to contact their respective worker while they in their family
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time
and long holidays even not to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
the personal messages to them.
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Governments
have already in place by certain amendments for the
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companies
. Of
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course they
are failing in execution of those
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rules
. In order to minimize the public death the
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companies
should follow those stringent policies.
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IELTS essay some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages the disadvantages v. 7

Essay
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4 paragraphs
367 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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