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In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education. v. 1
In the recent past, we have witnessed a tremendous increase in the number of online courses being offered to students in various subjects. This has surely decreased the dependence on traditional classroom education for many. However, in my opinion the role of teachers in learning cannot be replaced by any other mode of education. It can be agreedthat online courses offer number of benefits. First and foremost, students can learn anytime and from anywhere in the world. Course can be selected on the basis of one’s schedule. For Instance, students can study while sitting at the comfort of their homes or while traveling. Secondly, students can also choose the pace of the course they are studying. Every student has a different ability of learning and, can taketime till they have fully understood the lesson. On the other hand, it can be argued that conventional classroom teaching is best for the holistic development of a child. Classroom teaching encourages debates and discussion which enhances the learning ability of children and it encourages health competition as well. These 2 attributes work like assets while securing employment positions in future. Further, teachers respond to student’s queries in real time which is absent in online courses. Various subjects such as chemistry and biology need the controlled environment of laboratories for learning; experiments conducted by students needs to be monitored by teachers for safety and better understanding. To sum up, though the popularity of online courses is increasing due to ease of study and the availability of a plethora subjects offered, still it cannot replace traditional classroom studying with the help of teachers. Teachers form an integral part of learning and development of children.
In the recent past, we have witnessed a tremendous increase in the number of
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online
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courses
being offered
to
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students
in various subjects. This has
surely
decreased the dependence on traditional classroom education for
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many
.
However
, in my opinion the role of
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teachers
in
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learning
cannot
be replaced
by any other mode of education.

It can be
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agreedthat
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online
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courses
offer number of benefits.
First
and foremost,
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students
can learn anytime and from anywhere in the world.
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Course
can
be selected
on the basis of one’s schedule.
For Instance
,
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students
can study while sitting at the comfort of their homes or while traveling.
Secondly
,
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students
can
also
choose the pace of the
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course
they are studying. Every
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student
has a
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different
ability of
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learning
and, can
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taketime
till they have
fully
understood the lesson.

On the other hand
, it can
be argued
that conventional classroom teaching is best for the holistic development of a child. Classroom teaching encourages debates and discussion which enhances the
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learning
ability of children and it encourages health competition
as well
. These 2 attributes work like assets while securing employment positions
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in future
.
Further
,
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teachers
respond to
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student’s
queries in real time which is absent in
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online
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courses
. Various subjects such as chemistry and biology need the controlled environment of laboratories for
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learning
; experiments conducted by
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students
needs to
be monitored
by
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teachers
for safety and better understanding.

To sum up, though the popularity of
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online
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courses
is increasing due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
of study and the availability of a plethora subjects offered,
still
it cannot replace traditional classroom studying with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of
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teachers
.
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Teachers
form an integral part of
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learning
and development of children.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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