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Teachers used to convey information, but now wide sources of information are available online. Some people think there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Teachers used to convey information, but now wide sources of information are available online. Some people think there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. Others disagree. v. 2
Considering the definition of teachers as the conveyors of the information on the one hand, and the availability of wide sources of online information on the other hand, I strongly disagree that there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. Regarding the selection of appropriate information for students, the importance of information interpretation as well as the psychological impact of teacher presence in the class, I integrally tend to take the opposite direction of the statement that in the modern education the teachers should be eliminated. To elaborate more on the topic mentioned, the following reasons and examples will be presented. First and foremost, being one of the most proliferated prominence element for all educational systems, the critical role of teacher should not be confined as the information conveyors. Although, there are the lots of online information for all the internet users, the teacher plays a crucial role to interpret them in an effective way based on the thorough recognition of students and the psychological characteristics of them. It is obvious that most of the online information is not uploaded based on the educational need of the users. In other words, the foundation and motivation for sharing of information using the world wide web, as far I am concerned, are based on the interest of users not their educational needs and the monetary or advertisement goals. Regarding this issue, one cannot gives the credit to the proportion of this online information to the educational needs of the students. As a result, not only the teacher responsibility can be considered as the selector of the suitable information, but also can be denoted as the influential interpreter of crude information. Consequently, despite the immense volume of online information, the necessity of the teacher in educational institution become crystal clear. Another primary reason can be ascribed to the psychological impact of teachers in all educational institutes from antediluvian to modern systems. It goes without saying that the educational requirements of students cannot restricted to their knowledge but the formation of their personality can be implied as the ardor topic in the modern life. I immensely believe that the successful educational system should regard numerous psychological programs for their students. To my best knowledge, the deficiency of the perfect psychological training course based on the integral assessment of the users in the online information is capricious. It is also worth nothing that the psychological influence of the real human as the teacher in the educational system is categorically more than the virtual trainer or special character in the internet. The selection of some teacher behaviors by students particularly the young ones can be indicated as the good example for this subject. To recapitulate, I cannot agree more about the vital role of teacher in the modern education system considering the presence of intelligent person to select, interpret and convey the appropriate information from the crude available information. Moreover, the psychological affection of student to follow their education cannot stimulate by the online trainers and to my best knowledge, the perfect teacher can play fundamental role in the topic.
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teachers
as the conveyors of the
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information
on the one hand, and the availability of wide sources of
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online
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information
on the other hand
, I
strongly
disagree that there is no
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role
for
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teachers
to play in
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modern
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education
. Regarding the selection of appropriate
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information
for
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students
, the importance of
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information
interpretation
as well
as the
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psychological
impact of
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teacher
presence in the
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class
, I
integrally
tend to take the opposite direction of the statement that in the
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modern
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education
the
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teachers
should
be eliminated
. To elaborate more on the topic mentioned, the following reasons and examples will
be presented
.

First
and foremost, being one of the most proliferated prominence element for all
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educational
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systems
, the critical
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role
of
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teacher
should not
be confined
as the
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information
conveyors. Although, there are the lots of
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online
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information
for all the internet
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users
, the
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teacher
plays a crucial
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role
to interpret them
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in an effective way
based on the thorough recognition of
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students
and the
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psychological
characteristics of them. It is obvious that most of the
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online
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information
is not uploaded based on the
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educational
need of the
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users
.
In other words
, the foundation and motivation for sharing of
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information
using the
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world wide web
, as far I
am concerned
,
are based
on the interest of
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users
not their
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educational
needs and the monetary or advertisement goals. Regarding this issue, one cannot
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gives
the credit to the proportion of this
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online
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information
to the
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educational
needs of the
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students
.
As a result
, not
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only
the
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teacher
responsibility can
be considered
as the selector of the suitable
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information
,
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but
also
can
be denoted
as the influential interpreter of crude
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information
.
Consequently
, despite the immense volume of
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online
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information
, the necessity of the
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teacher
in
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educational
institution become crystal
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clear
.

Another primary reason can
be ascribed
to the
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psychological
impact of
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teachers
in all
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educational
institutes from antediluvian to
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modern
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systems
. It goes without saying that the
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educational
requirements of
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students
cannot
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restricted
to their knowledge
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but
the formation of their personality can
be implied
as the ardor topic in the
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modern
life. I
immensely
believe that the successful
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educational
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system
should regard numerous
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psychological
programs for their
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students
. To my best knowledge, the deficiency of the perfect
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psychological
training course based on the integral assessment of the
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users
in the
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online
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information
is capricious. It is
also
worth nothing that the
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psychological
influence of the real human as the
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teacher
in the
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educational
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system
is
categorically
more than the virtual trainer or special character
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in the internet
. The selection of
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some
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teacher
behaviors by
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students
particularly
the young ones can
be indicated
as the
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good
example for this subject.

To recapitulate, I cannot
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agree
more about the vital
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role
of
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teacher
in the
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modern
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education
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system
considering the presence of intelligent person to select, interpret and convey the appropriate
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information
from the crude available
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information
.
Moreover
, the
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psychological
affection of
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student
to follow their
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education
cannot stimulate by the
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online
trainers and to my best knowledge, the perfect
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teacher
can play fundamental
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role
in the topic.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
81Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Teachers used to convey information, but now wide sources of information are available online. Some people think there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. Others disagree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
517 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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