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Universities should accept numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Universities should accept numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 5
Higher institutions ought to accept proportions of boys and girls students in all subjects. I completely agree with the statement because it will foster equal opportunity and prevent discrimination. Universities that enrol both sexes in every subject do this to foster equality. Meaning they ensure that the students have equal opportunity to learn various topics, and become masters in those subjects. For example, the college of medicine in Ibadan admitted an equal number of male and females into their medical school, and this has helped both sexes compete where necessary. Therefore, admitting boys and girls in all subjects in the university will give them the same avenue to explore. Another reason is that it helps prevent discrimination. That is, the girl child does not feel like she is not recognized as part of the society as more boys are given preference. For instance, my uncle's daughter who read architecture at the University of Benin, Edo State, Nigeria, graduated with a first class because there was no discrimination among students in her class. The lecturers gave each of the students the same tasks, and as such, it helped them realize there is no preferential treatment for anyone. So, bias can be prevented when both sexes are admitted into every subject at the institution of higher learning. In conclusion, boys and girls should be admitted in every subject in the university because it will promote equality and prevent bias. Given this situation, the government should make it a policy to all institutions going forward.
Higher institutions ought to accept proportions of
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. I completely
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because
it will foster equal opportunity and
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prevent
discrimination.

Universities that enrol both sexes in every
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subject
do this to foster equality. Meaning they ensure that the
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students
have equal opportunity to learn various topics, and become masters in those
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subjects
.
For example
, the college of medicine in Ibadan admitted an equal number of male and females into their medical school, and this has
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helped
both sexes compete where necessary.
Therefore
, admitting
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boys
and
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girls
in all
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subjects
in the university will give them the same avenue to explore.

Another reason is that it
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helps
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prevent
discrimination.
That is
, the
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child does not feel like she is not recognized as part of the society as more
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boys
are
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given
preference.
For instance
, my uncle's daughter who read architecture at the University of Benin,
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State, Nigeria, graduated with a
first
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class
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because
there was no discrimination among
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in her
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class
. The lecturers gave each of the
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students
the same tasks, and as such, it
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helped
them realize there is no preferential treatment for anyone.
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So
, bias can be
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prevented
when both sexes
are admitted
into every
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subject
at the institution of higher learning.

In conclusion
,
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boys
and
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girls
should
be admitted
in every
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subject
in the university
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because
it will promote equality and
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prevent
bias.
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this situation, the
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government
should
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make
it a policy to all institutions going forward.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Universities should accept numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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