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In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v.33

In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 33
Night curfew is imposed on the US adolescents, whom it is obligatory to be indoors, except accompanied by a mature or grown up. In my view, this is the safest way to protect them from juvenile crime as well as from paedophile and miscreant traps. To begin with, this curfew initiates child safety and prevents them falling for juvenile crime, particularly which are done under the cover of darkness. For example, the drug dealers target their new customers during the night. If youngsters are lonely, they are more likely to fall for it without realising the severe consequences of their actions. They may start using it out of curiosity and sooner or later may become addicted. If teenagers are accompanied by an adult, they will not drink and drive, also criminals are less likely to approach them. Therefore, keeping adolescents confined to their homes throughout the night is beneficial. On the other hand, despite imposing night curfew on teenagers is beneficial in many ways, some people think it is humiliating and violation of human rights. For instance, the US social workers opposed such curfews and claimed that children should not to be forbidden by law, because it is like a criminal treatment. Such people voiced their opinion to increase patrols in areas, where paedophile and miscreant are more likely to trap juveniles, and instead of locking teens indoor and snatching away their freedom, make streets crime free. In my view, while cities are made crime free, it is better to impose a night curfew on children to keep them safe and sound. In conclusion, although some find it harmful, it is the safest approach to prevent teenagers from crime which is purposely done in the dark hours. Children are vulnerable and less likely to understand the difference between a good and bad company, hence it is best be accompanied by their parents or guardian.
Night
curfew
is imposed
on the US adolescents, whom it is obligatory to be indoors, except accompanied by a mature or grown up. In my view, this is the safest way to protect them from juvenile
crime
as well
as from
paedophile
and miscreant traps.

To
begin
with, this
curfew
initiates child safety and
prevents
them falling for juvenile
crime
,
particularly
which
are done
under the cover of darkness.
For example
, the drug dealers target their new customers during the
night
. If youngsters are lonely, they are more
likely
to fall for it without
realising
the severe consequences of their actions. They may
start
using it out of curiosity and sooner or later may become addicted. If
teenagers
are accompanied
by an adult, they will not drink and drive,
also
criminals are less
likely
to approach them.
Therefore
, keeping adolescents confined to their homes throughout the
night
is beneficial.

On the other hand
, despite imposing
night
curfew
on
teenagers
is beneficial in
many
ways,
some
people
think
it is humiliating and violation of human rights.
For instance
, the US social workers opposed such
curfews
and claimed that children should not to
be forbidden
by law,
because
it is like a criminal treatment. Such
people
voiced their opinion to increase patrols in areas, where
paedophile
and miscreant are more
likely
to trap juveniles, and
instead
of locking teens indoor and snatching away their freedom,
make
streets
crime
free. In my view, while cities
are made
crime
free, it is better to impose a
night
curfew
on children to
keep
them safe and sound.

In conclusion
, although
some
find it harmful, it is the safest approach to
prevent
teenagers
from
crime
which is
purposely
done in the dark hours. Children are vulnerable and less
likely
to understand the difference between a
good
and
bad
company
,
hence
it is best
be accompanied
by their parents or guardian.
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? v. 33

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