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In the past people were more friendly than they are today. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

In the past people were more friendly than they are today. v. 1
One people' s relationship with others is the most important aspect of his life, and to some extent determines the life he live in. Nowadays, some people claim that in comparison with past, people now do not treat others around him friendly enough. I strongly agree with such statement for the following reasons. With the development of science and technology, the society we live in has been becoming more and more competitive and stressful, thus, people today have to compete with other people for the limited resources. In the past, there was not so many people and the capacity of our society was so large that it can provide everybody with the equal opportunity. But now, the condition have been changed dramatically. Our society is no longer able to support the increasingly number of people. As the consequence, in order to live a better or sometimes even normal and to avoid falling behind, people now have to their best to pursue every chance to improve themselves. They might become indifferent about other people' s feelings like people in the past might do. Therefore, people not become less friendly not because of selfish, but because the conflicts between the increasingly number of people and the limited natural resources. Besides the more competitive society, the advanced communication technology have contributed greatly to the decrease of friendliness. In the past, we usually shear our feeling with person who live closely with us, like our parents or our neighbors. The more feeling we shear with others the closer relationship we will enjoy, thus, we would be more concerned about people around us. But now, the Internet have connected people all around the globe, and we seem to live in a big online community. We can chat and communicate with each other without being blocked by the time and distance. Although, it seems that we have more friends, the number of people we really care about or the people who care about us is decreasing. We no longer live together, and usually do not have the common things that we are both interested in to talk about. Nor are we willing to shearing our true feeling with others. So, the advances in the communication technology is also the essential factor that make people less friendly. From what have mentioned above, people today do become less friendly than in the past. But, this tend is resulted from the development of society and there is no way to avoid it.
One
people&
#039; s relationship with others is the most
important
aspect of his life, and to
some
extent determines the life he
live
in. Nowadays,
some
people
claim that
in comparison
with
past
,
people
now
do not treat others around him friendly
enough
. I
strongly
agree
with such statement for the following reasons.

With the development of science and technology, the
society
we
live
in has been becoming more and more competitive and stressful,
thus
,
people
today
have to
compete with
other
people
for the limited resources. In the
past
, there was not
so
many
people
and the capacity of our
society
was
so
large that it can provide everybody with the equal opportunity.
But
now
, the condition have been
changed
dramatically
. Our
society
is no longer able to support the
increasingly
number of
people
. As the consequence, in order to
live
a better or
sometimes
even normal and to avoid falling behind,
people
now
have to
their best to pursue every chance to
improve
themselves. They might become indifferent about
other
people&
#039; s
feelings
like
people
in the
past
might do.
Therefore
,
people
not become less friendly not
because
of selfish,
but
because
the conflicts between the
increasingly
number of
people
and the limited natural resources.

Besides
the more competitive
society
, the advanced communication technology have contributed
greatly
to the decrease of friendliness. In the
past
, we
usually
shear our
feeling
with person who
live
closely
with us, like our parents or our neighbors. The more
feeling
we shear with others the closer relationship we will enjoy,
thus
, we would be more concerned about
people
around us.
But
now
, the Internet have connected
people
all around the globe, and we seem to
live
in a
big
online community. We can chat and communicate with each
other
without
being blocked
by the time and distance. Although, it seems that we have more friends, the number of
people
we
really
care about or the
people
who care about us is decreasing. We no longer
live
together, and
usually
do not have the common things that we are both interested in to talk about. Nor are we willing to shearing our true
feeling
with others.
So
, the advances in the communication technology is
also
the essential factor that
make
people
less friendly.

From what have mentioned above,
people
today
do become less friendly than in the
past
.
But
,
this tend
is resulted
from the development of
society
and there is no way to avoid it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In the past people were more friendly than they are today. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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