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TPO 37 - Q2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students will learn more if the teacher is kind and friendly. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v.1

TPO 37 - Q2 Students will learn more if the teacher is kind and friendly. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 1
It is irrefutable that the number of road accidents has increased significantly in the cities since last few years. Therefore, people are highly divided on whether lowering the speed limit is the best regulative approach or there are other ways that could be adopted to ensure road safety. Both perspectives have some arguments in favour and against them as well. I am in favour of the latter assertion that many other ways can be a opted instead of lowering the limit of speed only to control the rate of accidents the first and foremost way is to educate people before they started driving when they will be aware about all the guidelines and its importance. It can be ensured by taking difficult driving test efficient driver's number will increase. As a result, roads will be safer to drive. In addition, safety of city roads can also be increased by using other methods. For instance, different parts of the road can be covered with warning signal Road bends to control traffic strict punishment should be imposed on the offenders who can be detected by installing cameras on a road. Hence, it can act as a deterrent to accidents on the road. On the contrary, some people who contradict my view might argue that the speed of the vehicle should be controlled. As high speed is likely to impose a threat to life. It is possible to slow it down for safety purposes. Consequently, it will not only save human life, but also will decrease the chance of vehicle damage. In the epilogue, although there are some benefits of controlling the speed limit of vehicles in the cities, these are also more important ways to control this situation. However, people should also understand their responsibility for laws.
It is irrefutable that the number of
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road
accidents has increased
significantly
in the cities since last few years.
Therefore
,
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people
are
highly
divided on whether lowering the
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speed
limit is the best regulative approach or there are other
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ways
that could
be adopted
to ensure
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road
safety. Both perspectives have
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some
arguments in
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favour
and against them
as well
.

I am in
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favour
of the latter assertion that
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many
other
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ways
can be
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a
opted
instead
of lowering the limit of
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speed
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only
to control the rate of accidents the
first
and foremost
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way
is to educate
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people
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before
they
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started
driving when they will be aware about all the guidelines and its importance. It can
be ensured
by taking difficult driving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
efficient driver's number will increase.
As a result
,
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roads
will be safer to drive.

In addition
, safety of city
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roads
can
also
be increased
by using other methods.
For instance
,
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different
parts of the
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road
can
be covered
with warning signal
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Road
bends to control traffic strict punishment should
be imposed
on the offenders who can
be detected
by installing cameras on a
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road
.
Hence
, it can act as a deterrent to accidents on the road.

On the contrary
,
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some
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people
who contradict my view might argue that the
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speed
of the vehicle should
be controlled
.
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As
high
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speed
is likely to impose a threat to life. It is possible to slow it down for safety purposes.
Consequently
, it will not
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only
save human life,
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but
also
will decrease the chance of vehicle damage.

In the epilogue, although there are
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some
benefits of controlling the
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speed
limit of vehicles in the cities, these are
also
more
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important
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ways
to control this situation.
However
,
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people
should
also
understand their responsibility for laws.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 37 - Q2 Students will learn more if the teacher is kind and friendly. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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