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In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? v.4

In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? v. 4
After clearing the graduation milestone, the next big event in anyone's life is getting a job. A few have difficulty finding the right job and eventually keep on frequently changing their employer while others are lucky to find it in the first attempt and tend to remain with the same employer for their entire career life. While both the approaches may have its own advantages and disadvantages, I believe in working with a particular firm for an extended period is far more beneficial than continually switching between employers and this essay would discuss the positives and negatives of both approaches in detail. Firstly, people frequently change their jobs mainly because they are unsatisfied with the working environment or they want a higher salary. Whatever be the reason, the primary advantage of changing firms is the opportunity to learn different technology and science. For example, in the IT sector, different companies use different coding languages depending upon their work culture and an IT engineer switching between different firm gets a hands on experience working with different computer languages thus increasing his knowledge. However, on the downside, the hiring manager may consider it otherwise, such as being fired due to misconduct. Due to this many hiring managers perform a background check of such applicants. On the other hand, some may not change their employers much frequently, maybe because of family issues or they are working for a reputed firm with a high salary. Such approach helps people settle down in a particular city and not worry about the hazel of shifting to different cities. According to a survey conducted amongst the city migrants in New York, around 60% of them said that, finding an accommodation is the second most difficult task next to finding a job. On the contrary, continuing with the same company for the entire career life may get monotonous and boring. Despite of it becoming monotonous after sometime, the employee can surely ask for a transfer in some other section and have a fresh start in a different department while still serving the same establishment. In conclusion, frequently changing jobs has many positive implications and knowledge expansion is one of them, however, spending entire working life with a single firm is more beneficial as it helps a individual to settle down. In my opinion, the advantage of working for a particular company outweighs its own disadvantage and is far better than constantly changing the company.
After clearing the graduation milestone, the
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in anyone's
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is getting a
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job
. A few have difficulty finding the right
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job
and
eventually
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on
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frequently
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their
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employer
while others are lucky to find it in the
first
attempt and tend to remain with the same
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employer
for their entire career
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life
. While both the approaches may have its
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own
advantages and disadvantages, I believe in
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working
with a particular
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firm
for an extended period is far more beneficial than
continually
switching between
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employers
and this essay would discuss the positives and negatives of both approaches in detail.

Firstly
,
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jobs
mainly
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because
they
are unsatisfied
with the
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working
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environment or
they want a higher salary. Whatever be the reason, the primary advantage of
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changing
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firms
is the opportunity to learn
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different
technology and science.
For example
, in the IT sector,
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different
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companies
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use
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different
coding languages depending upon their work culture and an IT engineer switching between
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different
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firm
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gets
a hands on experience
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working
with
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different
computer languages
thus
increasing his knowledge.
However
, on the downside, the hiring manager may consider it
otherwise
, such as
being fired
due to misconduct. Due to this
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many
hiring managers perform a background
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check
of such applicants.

On the other hand
,
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may not
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much
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, maybe
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because
of family
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issues or
they are
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working
for a reputed
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firm
with a high salary. Such approach
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helps
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people
settle down in a particular city and not worry about the hazel of shifting to
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different
cities. According to a survey conducted amongst the city migrants in New York, around 60% of them said that, finding
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an accommodation
is the second most difficult task
next
to finding a
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job
.
On the contrary
, continuing with the same
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company
for the entire career
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life
may
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monotonous and boring.
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it becoming monotonous after sometime, the employee can
surely
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a transfer in
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other section and have a fresh
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in a
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different
department while
still
serving the same establishment.

In conclusion
,
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changing
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jobs
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positive
implications and knowledge expansion is one of them,
however
, spending entire
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working
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life
with a single
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firm
is more beneficial as it
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helps
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a
individual to settle down. In my opinion, the advantage of
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working
for a particular
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company
outweighs its
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own
disadvantage and is far better than
constantly
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changing
the
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company
.
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IELTS essay In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
406 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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