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When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 4
It is said that the main parameter in designing a construction is its function rather than its exterior design. But I do not think the function is more important than the façade. Exterior design is as prominent as the use of a building because it affects people’s spiritual well-being. Fascinating and novel designs with a variety of colours or application of some objects like small light bulbs for light-designing in the façade of a building improves the visual beauty of the city. This beauty resulted from diversity in appearance freshens people up and they feel more alive in such Cities. This good feeling can reduce the stress and tension they face in their hectic life. So that a city with beautifully designed buildings can influence people spiritually. Moreover, exterior designing increases job security for architects and designers. A large group of people study in universities for many years to become an architect or designer. By reduction in the importance of exterior designing, many of these people have fewer jobs to do. So their job security decreases. On the other hand, considering a building’s function the most important factor in designing and pay less attention to its outward appearance is an environmentally friendly behaviour. Because construction materials needed for a building reduce. As people care less about the façade, they use these mostly unrenewable resources like marble stones or ornamental bricks less which is an environmentally friendly behaviour. However, there are also some environmentally friendly measures which can be taken in designing a building’s façade. For example, designing a marble stone façade will reduce electrical energy consumption used for cooling in summer as it absorbs heat less than concrete. In conclusion, although a building’s use is a prominent factor in its designing, it is not the most important one and other parameters like the outward appearance is as important.
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is said
that the main parameter in designing a construction is its function
rather
than its exterior design.
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But
I do not
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think
the function is more
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important
than the façade.

Exterior design is as prominent as the
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use
of a
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building
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because
it affects
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people’s
spiritual well-being. Fascinating and novel designs with a variety of
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colours
or application of
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some
objects like
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small
light bulbs for light-designing in the façade of a
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building
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improves
the visual beauty of the city. This beauty resulted from diversity in appearance freshens
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people
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up and
they feel more alive in such Cities. This
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good
feeling can
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reduce
the
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stress
and tension they face in their hectic life.
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So that
a city with
beautifully
designed
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buildings
can influence
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people
spiritually
.

Moreover
, exterior designing increases job security for architects and designers. A large group of
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people
study in universities for
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many
years to become an architect or designer. By reduction in the importance of exterior designing,
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many
of these
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people
have fewer jobs to do.
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So
their job security decreases.

On the other hand
, considering a
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building’s
function the most
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important
factor in designing and pay
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less
attention to its outward appearance is an
environmentally
friendly
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behaviour
.
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Because
construction materials needed for a
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building
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reduce
. As
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people
care
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less
about the façade, they
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use
these
mostly
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unrenewable
resources like marble stones or ornamental bricks
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less
which is an
environmentally
friendly
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behaviour
.
However
, there are
also
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some
environmentally
friendly measures which can
be taken
in designing a
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building’s
façade.
For example
, designing a marble stone façade will
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reduce
electrical energy consumption
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used
for cooling in summer as it absorbs heat
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less
than concrete.

In conclusion
, although a
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building’s
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use
is a prominent factor in its designing, it is not the most
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important
one and other parameters like the outward appearance is as
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important
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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