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In the past, people spent their entire lives doing one job. But nowadays, they change their jobs frequently. Give reason and suggestion

In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? v. 3

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IELTS essay In the past, people spent their entire lives doing one job. But nowadays, they change their jobs frequently. Give reason and suggestion

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American English

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84 words

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