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In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any r v.3

In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? 3
In the past, people used to work for the same company all their lives. In recent years, there has been an increase in the number of people who prefer to work for a variety of companies. This essay will show that despite there being many financial benefits to having a one-company career, it is better to switch workplaces regularly in order to fully develop. On the one hand, those who believe that having the same job throughout their lives argue that it gives them financial stability. Long term employees normally accrue financial rewards such as a higher salary and a decent pension plan. For instance, long-term employees of the UK government can normally retire when they are 55 with 75% of their final salary paid to them each month until they die. However, having the same job for life does not suit everyone and could leave to certain level of stagnation. People working for a variety of companies are given more opportunities to learn different skills. When workers start a new job, they will be exposed to new co-workers and a different corporate culture that shows them how to do things differently. For example, Wired Magazine recently reported that the average Apple employee only works there for 5 years and the average Google worker is there for less than 2 for this very reason. In conclusion, while working for the same company all our lives can give financial security, this essay believes that it is better to work for different companies to grow and become better than before.
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financial
benefits to having a one-
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career, it is better to switch workplaces
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in order to
fully
develop.

On the one hand, those who believe that having the same job throughout their
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lives
argue that it gives them
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financial
stability. Long term employees
normally
accrue
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financial
rewards such as a higher salary and a decent pension plan.
For instance
, long-term employees of the UK
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government
can
normally
retire when they are 55 with 75% of their final salary paid to them each month until they
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.
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, having the same job for life does not suit everyone and could
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leave
to certain level of stagnation.

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companies
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more opportunities to learn
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different
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a new job, they will
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to new co-workers and a
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different
corporate culture that
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shows
them how to do things
differently
.
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, Wired Magazine recently reported that the average Apple employee
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reason.

In conclusion
, while working for the same
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company
all our
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lives
can give
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financial
security, this essay believes that it is better to
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work
for
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different
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companies
to grow and become better than
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before
.
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IELTS essay In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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