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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience. v.4

In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. v. 4
In the current decade, there has been heated debate that animals should not be used for rudimentary requirements of human beings. I partially agree with this statement. There are numerous organisations, who are fighting for the ethical treatment with animals and ban on killing these creatures for our benefit. While there is still a need to find alternatives in the field of medicinal research. To begin with, vegetables contain an equal proportion of vitamins and proteins in comparison to animal flesh. Researchers have found that people who follow a vegan diet are much healthier than the ones who consume non-vegetarian food. For instance, many sportsmen who follow vegetarian diet show a tremendous increase in their performance and stamina. Moreover, in the majority of the parts of the world, stern laws have been implemented by the governments and the usage of animal skin for clothing is now a punishable offence. On the contrary, it is worthwhile to mention that multifarious developments have been seen in the field of medicinal research, however, scientists are not able to find any alternatives to the utilisation of animals in clinical trials for testing of new drugs. Nevertheless, with the increased intervention of welfare organisations like PETA, it is expected that the use of animals for experiments will surely diminish in future years. Additionally, doctors are not able to invent any supplement to replace the use of aquatic species such as fish are still used to produce medicines like fish oil, which has enormous benefits to human health. To recapitulate, I do not fully agree that it is not necessary to utilize animals for human consumption as there are a plethora of creatures killed by medical researchers for testing and production of numerous medicines. However, a downward trend has been witnessed on consumption of animals in order to meet the fundamental necessities of the layman by the increased influence of animal activists.
In the
current
decade, there has
been heated
debate that
animals
should not be
used
for rudimentary requirements of human beings. I
partially
agree
with this statement. There are numerous
organisations
,
who
are fighting for the ethical treatment with
animals
and ban on killing these creatures for our benefit.
While
there is
still
a need to find alternatives in the field of medicinal research.

To
begin
with, vegetables contain an equal proportion of vitamins and proteins
in comparison
to
animal
flesh. Researchers have found that
people
who
follow a vegan diet are much healthier than the ones
who
consume non-vegetarian food.
For instance
,
many
sportsmen
who
follow vegetarian diet
show
a tremendous increase in their performance and stamina.
Moreover
, in the majority of the parts of the world, stern laws have
been implemented
by the
governments
and the usage of
animal
skin for clothing is
now
a punishable
offence
.

On the contrary
, it is worthwhile to mention that multifarious developments have been
seen
in the field of medicinal research,
however
, scientists are not able to find any alternatives to the
utilisation
of
animals
in clinical trials for testing of new drugs.
Nevertheless
, with the increased intervention of welfare
organisations
like PETA, it is
expected
that the
use
of
animals
for experiments will
surely
diminish in future years.
Additionally
, doctors are not able to invent any supplement to replace the
use
of aquatic species such as fish are
still
used
to produce medicines like fish oil, which has enormous benefits to human health.

To recapitulate, I do not
fully
agree
that it is not necessary to utilize
animals
for human consumption as there are a plethora of creatures killed by medical researchers for testing and production of numerous medicines.
However
, a downward trend has
been witnessed
on consumption of
animals
in order to
meet
the fundamental necessities of the layman by the increased influence of
animal
activists.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
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