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In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience. v.1

In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. v. 1
In the world of today, some people are of the opinion that animals should no longer be used and killed for food, fashion or medical industries. I find this idea partly agreeable as there is still a need to use animals in different purposes of life. On the one hand, people have their valid points to prove for the unnecessarily of killing and abusing animals for industries. It is undeniable that the world is significantly developing and we have found alternative ways to produce food. For instance, scientist recently have come up with plan-based meat and artificial meat that contains an equal amount of nutrition, such as fat, protein or vitamins, compared to regular meat. If we can produce and expand the use of this invention in mass scale, butchers and cattle will no longer be needed and animals can have their free lives like they used to have before in the ecosystem, and actually deserves for that. Regarding the aspect of clothing production, using artificial fabrics from plants and chemicals for daily clothes has been increasingly popular. In fact, not only man-made garments are sustainable to use, but it is also has definitely better outlook, in comparison with ones made from animals’ fur and skin. Concerning the medical perspective, Artificial Intelligent has been largely developed to a level that it can help humans to analysis and evaluate side effects and the safety level; therefore, animal testing is unnecessary. Furthermore, traditional medicines made from animals like cobra or rhino’s horn have been proved by specialists and scientists to be useless and have no actual benefits. On the other hand, animals are still useful to be use to produce products serving human daily lives. First of all, meat-eaters make up 70% of the world population, so a ban on killing animals for meat seems to be unreasonable. Also, as if millions of butchers and cattle were not allowed to milk their cash cows, they would be pushed to unemployment with millions of people losing their job and being unable to make end meets. Next, in the fashion industry, some areas with extreme weather like North America or African still need to use animals’ skin and fur to prevent themselves from the deadly cold and hot weather. For example, in Canada, although people are aware of the cruelty of killing gooses for fur to make winter jackets, they still have no choice but using it, due to its irrefutable effectiveness. Lastly, in the medical aspect, there is no doubt that animal testing is still necessary as it helps human to ensure that new treatments are safe to use with no side effects or risks. It is undoubtedly true that humans should be prioritized over animals and it is better to have an animal suffer, rather than a human to die. In conclusion, although abusing animals for the production of food, clothing and medicine are considered to be cruel, we still need to keep doing it as humans’ lives still depend heavily on those activities.
In the world of
today
,
some
people
are of the opinion that
animals
should no longer be
used
and killed for food, fashion or medical industries. I find this
idea
partly agreeable as there is
still
a need to
use
animals
in
different
purposes of life.

On the one hand,
people
have their valid points to prove for the
unnecessarily
of killing and abusing
animals
for industries. It is undeniable that the world is
significantly
developing and
we have found alternative ways to produce food.
For instance
, scientist recently have
come
up with plan-based
meat
and artificial
meat
that contains an equal amount of nutrition, such as
fat
, protein or vitamins, compared to regular
meat
. If we can produce and expand the
use
of this invention in mass scale, butchers and cattle will no longer
be needed
and
animals
can have their free
lives
like they
used
to have
before
in the ecosystem, and actually deserves for that. Regarding the aspect of clothing production, using artificial fabrics from plants and chemicals for daily clothes has been
increasingly
popular. In fact, not
only
man
-made garments are sustainable to
use
,
but
it is
also
has definitely
better
outlook,
in comparison
with ones made from
animals’
fur and skin. Concerning the medical perspective, Artificial Intelligent has been
largely
developed to a level that it can
help
humans
to analysis and evaluate side effects and the safety level;
therefore
,
animal
testing is unnecessary.
Furthermore
, traditional medicines made from
animals
like cobra or rhino’s horn have
been proved
by specialists and scientists to be useless and have no actual benefits.

On the other hand
,
animals
are
still
useful to be
use to
produce products serving
human
daily
lives
.
First of all
, meat-eaters
make
up 70% of the world population,
so
a ban on killing
animals
for
meat
seems to be unreasonable.
Also
, as if millions of butchers and cattle were not
allowed
to milk their cash cows, they would
be pushed
to unemployment with millions of
people
losing their job and being unable to
make
end
meets.
Next
, in the fashion industry,
some
areas with extreme weather like North America or African
still
need to
use
animals’
skin and fur to
prevent
themselves from the deadly
cold
and hot weather.
For example
, in Canada, although
people
are aware of the cruelty of killing gooses for fur to
make
winter jackets, they
still
have no choice
but
using it, due to its irrefutable effectiveness.
Lastly
, in the medical aspect, there is no doubt that
animal
testing is
still
necessary as it
helps
human
to ensure that new treatments are safe to
use
with no side effects or
risks
. It is
undoubtedly
true that
humans
should
be prioritized
over
animals
and it is better to have an
animal
suffer,
rather
than a
human
to
die
.

In conclusion
, although abusing
animals
for the production of food, clothing and medicine
are considered
to be cruel, we
still
need to
keep
doing it as
humans’
lives
still
depend
heavily
on those activities.
22Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
502 words
6
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