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In the modern society, schools are no longer necessary as we could have so much information throughout the internet that children could study at home as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

In the modern society, schools are no longer necessary as we could have so much information throughout the internet that children could study at home as well. v. 2
It is true that the ever advancement of virtual network technology has been encouraging people to put more value on the on-line study. Although one argument is that schools will be completely replaced by studying through the Internet, I firmly against with the opinion. There is no doubt that students could derive some unique benefits from studying at school. First of all, school teaching is more capable than the Internet in cultivating a responsible and contributing generation. This has been proved by the walking examples that students, especially young children, always regard their teachers as role models. By imitating and listening to their teachers, students are able to learn to understand and share the value system of that society, thereby becoming capable individuals in the future. Additionally, teachers are more superior to computers in effectively imparting knowledge to children. This is because experienced teachers could change teaching methods according to the personality of different students, which can effectively enhance the teaching effects and learning outcomes. Admittedly, those who support learning from the Internet may also possess some sound points. In particular, the ever deepening development of the Internet enables people to access information and knowledge with a just click of a button, providing a rather appealing and easy way of learning. However, compared with the teacher, computer are much inferior in performing different scenarios and providing multi-functional instructions, which is largely attributed to its nature that can only provide some rigid and repetitive displays and have little flexibility. Therefore, it is unreasonable to say that school-age children can acquire enough knowledge simply through studying from the virtual world. In conclusion, although the Internet is an innovative way for people to acquire knowledge and information. I am in support of the idea that school education remains the most significance.
It is true that the ever advancement of virtual network technology has been encouraging
people
to put more value on the on-line study. Although one argument is that
schools
will be completely replaced by studying through the Internet, I
firmly
against with the opinion.

There is no doubt that
students
could derive
some
unique benefits from studying at
school
.
First of all
,
school
teaching is more capable than the Internet in cultivating a responsible and contributing generation. This has
been proved
by the walking examples that
students
,
especially
young children, always regard their
teachers
as role models. By imitating and listening to their
teachers
,
students
are able to learn to understand and share the value system of that society, thereby becoming capable individuals in the future.
Additionally
,
teachers
are more superior to computers in
effectively
imparting
knowledge
to children. This is
because
experienced
teachers
could
change
teaching methods according to the personality of
different
students
, which can
effectively
enhance the teaching effects and learning outcomes.

Admittedly
, those who support learning from the Internet may
also
possess
some
sound points.
In particular
, the ever deepening development of the Internet enables
people
to access information and
knowledge
with a
just
click of a button, providing a
rather
appealing and easy way of learning.
However
, compared with the
teacher
, computer are much inferior in performing
different
scenarios and providing multi-functional instructions, which is
largely
attributed to its nature that can
only
provide
some
rigid and repetitive displays and have
little
flexibility.
Therefore
, it is unreasonable to say that school-age children can acquire
enough
knowledge
simply
through studying from the virtual world.

In conclusion
, although the Internet is an innovative way for
people
to acquire
knowledge
and information. I am in support of the
idea
that
school
education remains the most significance.
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IELTS essay In the modern society, schools are no longer necessary as we could have so much information throughout the internet that children could study at home as well. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
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