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All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? how important is it for a child to learn a foreign language? v.5

All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? how important is it for a child to learn a foreign language? v. 5
It is compulsory to learn speaking a foreign language for all children immediately when they begin their school. Personally, I believe that this concept seems to be somewhat inadequate that I will explain below. First and foremost, the main obstacle would relate to the cost of learning a foreign language which may be expensive. The reason is often said that not all children have enough money to attend language course or to pay private tutor. A further issue is related to child’s cognitive capacity. This demonstrates that not all kids have the same ability to learn a foreign language and their native language at the same time. This would be better, if children learned to speak their mother’s language before they try to speak second-language. Perhaps, One point against this proposal is the added issue of culture interest, by which children would be more interested in foreign culture than their native culture. If this means children of one nation are obliged now to learn speaking foreign language, this is surely a further significant factor which clearly makes losing successor in culture and language. Admittedly, I agree with those who argue that learning a foreign language is very essential to improve other skills, since it is very challenging and enhances the brain' s abilities. Nevertheless, in my opinion, if this was implemented in improper time, it would make children becoming unfocused on improving one skill. this is because not all children can learn many things at the same time. In summary, It is logical to conclude that learning foreign language needs to be considered that not all children should learn speaking foreign language immediately, due to the high cost, child’s cognitive capacity, and effect on culture interest.
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explain
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and foremost, the main obstacle would relate to the cost of learning a
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foreign
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language
which may be expensive. The reason is
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often
said that not all
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children
have
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enough
money to attend
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language
course or to pay private tutor. A
further
issue
is related
to child’s cognitive capacity. This demonstrates that not all kids have the same ability to
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learn
a
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foreign
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language
and their native
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language
at the same time. This would be better, if
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children
learned to speak their mother’s
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language
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before
they try to speak second-language. Perhaps, One point against this proposal is the
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added
issue of
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culture
interest, by which
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children
would be more interested in
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foreign
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culture
than their native
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culture
. If this means
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children
of one nation
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, this is
surely
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clearly
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makes
losing successor in
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culture
and language.

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, I
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with those who argue that learning a
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is
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essential to
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, since it is
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challenging and enhances the
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was implemented
in improper time, it would
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children
becoming unfocused on improving one
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.
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to conclude
that learning
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needs to
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children
should
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language
immediately, due to the high cost, child’s cognitive capacity, and effect on
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culture
interest.
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36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? how important is it for a child to learn a foreign language? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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