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The invention, developments and usage of information technology arises as almost people are interested in involving it in everyday of their lives. Unfortunately, the negative effects of this improvements in IT might outweigh the positive side throughout the years that will come. Personally, I totally agree on this point of view and as we go along with this essay, we will tackle the various effects that might happen in the future. We cannot deny the fact that developments in information technology like the inventions of computers and laptop helps the people to make their work quicker and faster, easier access to files and individuals can do there job wherever they are as long as there is an internet connection. Moreover, the rise of demand of information technology shares a huge proportion in the economic growth of the country as well. Aside from that, most children and young adults are knowledgeable in this aspect, which makes them competitive and more confident as they go along with there choosen career. On the other hand, negative effects come up as the demand of usage of information technology rises. Most people rely much to this developments that they almost neglect the old good ways of writing and reading. Furthermore, lesser socialization comes in because of long hours of sitting in front of the computers, laptops and mobile phones. Longer usage means higher radiation exposure which contributes to the health deterrioration of the user. Moreover, exposure to prohibited videos are higher especially to the children; which should be guided by the parents to prevent further problems in the future. To sum it up, information technology development brings people both positive and negative effects. If negative side will rocketed, individuals must be responsible for this effect; thus, all improvements must be use in moderation.
The invention,
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developments
and usage of
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information
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technology
arises as almost
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people
are interested
in involving it in
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everyday
of their
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lives
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negative
effects of
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improvements in IT might outweigh the
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positive
side throughout the years that will
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agree
on this point of view and as we go along with this essay, we will tackle the various effects that might happen in the future.

We cannot deny the fact that
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developments
in
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information
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technology
like the inventions of computers and laptop
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helps
the
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people
to
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make
their work quicker and faster, easier access to files and individuals can do there job wherever they are as long as there is an internet connection.
Moreover
, the rise of demand of
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information
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technology
shares a huge proportion in the economic growth of the country
as well
. Aside from that, most children and young adults are knowledgeable in this aspect, which
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makes
them competitive and more confident as they go along with there
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choosen
career.

On the other hand
,
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negative
effects
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come
up as the demand of usage of
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information
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technology
rises. Most
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people
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rely
much to
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this
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developments
that they almost neglect the
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old
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good
ways of writing and reading.
Furthermore
, lesser socialization
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comes
in
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because
of long hours of sitting in front of the computers, laptops and mobile phones. Longer usage means higher radiation exposure which contributes to the health
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deterrioration
of the user.
Moreover
, exposure to prohibited videos are higher
especially
to the children; which should
be guided
by the parents to
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prevent
further
problems in the future.

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information
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technology
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development
brings
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people
both
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positive
and
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negative
effects. If
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negative
side will
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rocketed
, individuals
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must
be responsible for this
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effect
;
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, all improvements
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must
be
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use
in moderation.
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IELTS essay In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology, for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, this developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future.

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