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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.4

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 4
During the past 30 years, the evolution of technology and the facility to buy a vehicle have increased the number of car owner. However, the question we should ask is whether this expansion has a consequence on the traffic jam. At a time when where restricted traffic areas in the city are multiplying, the individual automobile continues to seduce. It’s a reality linked to the fact that today, people do not only have only a car in each family but well two or more. This is due to the rise of the personal requirement in particular working or others. Moreover, having his own car could be a synonym of freedom, especially for young people. However, the growth of cars moving towards the cities has definitely a consequence of the air pollution. It’s a subject that we couldn’t afford in these days and it’s the most negative aspects of the traffic jams. Another contributing fact is the birth of these new “city cars”. Economical and practical, they have a real impact on the transport and pollution today. We can associate the growth of the selling in these cars by the development in technology that makes these cars available for quite anyone. As a result, public authorities are struggling to find alternatives to the car in a way to discourage people from taking their car or at least reducing its use. In some countries, It is common that public transports are free for the over 65. The retired people should have this opportunity to be able to move freely as they do not have any more work restrictions. As the population gets older, it’s an advantage to take into consideration. For the other age band, the price of public transport should be at a reasonable price available for everyone. Furthermore, regular schedules and frequency of the bus races or trains should be taken in consideration. On balance, it’s true that being owner of a car has many advantages and a thought to the public transport may be done. However, we hope the technology will do its parts by reducing the CO2 emission in the future. It’s on its way.
During the past 30 years, the evolution of technology and the facility to
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buy
a vehicle have increased the number of
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car
owner.
However
, the question we should ask is whether this expansion has a consequence on the traffic jam.

At a time when where restricted traffic areas in the city are multiplying, the individual automobile continues to seduce. It’s a reality linked to the fact that
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today
,
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people
do not
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only
have
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only
a
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car
in each family
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but
well two or more. This is due to the rise of the personal requirement
in particular
working or others.
Moreover
, having his
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own
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car
could be a synonym of freedom,
especially
for young
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people
.
However
, the growth of
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cars
moving towards the cities has definitely a consequence of the air pollution. It’s a subject that we couldn’t afford in these days and it’s the most
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negative
aspects of the traffic jams. Another contributing fact is the birth of these new “city
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cars”
. Economical and practical, they have a real impact on the
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transport
and pollution
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. We can associate the growth of the selling in these
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cars
by the development in technology that
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makes
these
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cars
available for quite anyone.

As a result
,
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public
authorities are struggling to find alternatives to the
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car
in a way to discourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from taking their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
or at least reducing its
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use
. In
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some
countries, It is common that
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public
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transports
are free for the over 65. The retired
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people
should have this opportunity to be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
freely
as they do not have any more work restrictions. As the population
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
older, it’s an advantage to take into consideration. For the other age band, the price of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
should be at a reasonable price available for everyone.
Furthermore
, regular schedules and frequency of the bus races or trains should
be taken
in consideration.

On balance, it’s true that being owner of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages and a
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thought
to the
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public
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transport
may
be done
.
However
, we hope the technology will do its parts by reducing the CO2 emission in the future. It’s on its way.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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