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In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extent do you agree with this view v.1

In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. 1
The last two decades have seen enormous changes in the way people's lives are affected by IT, with many advances in this field. However, while these technological advances have brought many benefits to the world, it can be argued that these developments in IT will result in more negative impacts than positive. To begin, email has made communication, especially abroad, much simpler and faster, resulting in numerous benefits for commerce and business. Furthermore, the World Wide Web means that information on every conceivable subject is now available to us. For example, people can access news, medical advice, online education courses and much more via the internet. It is evident that these improvements have made life far easier and more convenient for large numbers of people and will continue to do so for decades to come. Nevertheless, the effects of this new technology have not all been beneficial. For example, many people feel that the widespread use of email is destroying traditional forms of communication such as letter writing, telephone and face-to-face conversation. This could result in a decline in people's basic ability to socialize and interact with each other on a day-to-day basis. In addition, the large size of the Web has meant that it is nearly impossible to regulate and control. This has led to many concerns regarding children accessing unsuitable websites and viruses. Unfortunately, this kind of problem might even get worse in the future at least until more regulated systems are set up. In conclusion, developments in IT have brought many benefits, yet I believe developments relating to new technology are likely to produce many negative effects in the future that must be addressed if we are to avoid damaging impacts on individuals and society.
The last two decades have
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enormous
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changes
in the way
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people
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lives
are
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affected
by IT, with
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many
advances in this field.
However
, while these technological advances have brought
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many
benefits to the world, it can
be argued
that these developments in IT will result in more
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negative
impacts than
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positive
.

To
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begin
, email has made communication,
especially
abroad, much simpler and faster, resulting in numerous benefits for commerce and business.
Furthermore
, the World Wide Web means that information on every conceivable subject is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
available to us.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can access news, medical advice, online education courses and much more via the internet. It is evident that these improvements have made life far easier and more convenient for large numbers of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and will continue to do
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so
for decades to
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come
.

Nevertheless
, the effects of this new technology have not all been beneficial.
For example
,
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
feel that the widespread
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of email is destroying traditional forms of communication such as letter writing, telephone and face-to-face conversation. This could result in a decline in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's basic ability to socialize and interact with each other on a day-to-day basis.

In addition
, the large size of the Web has meant that it is
nearly
impossible to regulate and control. This has led to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
concerns regarding children accessing unsuitable websites and viruses. Unfortunately, this kind of problem might even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
worse in the future at least until more regulated systems
are set
up.

In conclusion
, developments in IT have brought
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many
benefits,
yet
I believe developments relating to new technology are likely to produce
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects in the future that
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must
be addressed
if we are to avoid damaging impacts on individuals and society.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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