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In the last 20 years, there have been a significant development in the field ofInformation Technology, for example, the World Wide Web and communication byemail. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effectsthan positive in th v.1

In the last 20 years, there have been a significant development in the field ofInformation Technology, for example, the World Wide Web and communication byemail. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effectsthan positive in th v. 1
Some human beings believe that offenders should not be sentenced to jail. Instead, they ought to be given knowledge and competence training. In my perspective, I agree with the statement and believe that this is the most prolific for offenders. There are multiple reasons to support my argument with the statement that criminals should be imparted ability and educational training and not sentencing to prison. The first and the most compelling reason is it will aid criminals to get a job. In other words, most of the criminals who commit crime are either poor or unemployed, so training them with vivid skills and knowledge will aid offenders to earn their livelihood. For example, there is a culture in western India to train offenders who have committed minor crimes, which has helped to reduce such crime by 5% and helped around 33% criminals to get a job. Another argument is that training criminal and not sentencing them to prison will assist offenders to keep away from bad company. To be precise, prison is the home of criminals and if offenders are kept together they will make wrong friends and have a higher probability to re-offend once they are set free. Therefore, imparting offenders with useful abilities and knowledge will cater them to keep away from the wrong people and groups. For example, according to a recent survey by the Southern Police Department, 65% of the offenders did not indulge in crime after been trained at the rehabilitation centre. As a result, training aides not only to keep criminals out of bad company but also to reduce overall crimes. However, another side should not be neglected which claims that criminals ought to be sent to prison. It must be admitted that training offenders involve cost and this money can be spent on other crucial aspects such as education and sports. In conclusion, although there is a consent of monetary aspects in giving knowledge and ability training to offenders, I strongly believe that imparting such training will help the society to reduce overall crimes and aid offenders earn their living.
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Some
human beings believe that
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offenders
should not
be sentenced
to jail.
Instead
, they ought to be
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given
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knowledge
and competence
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training
. In my perspective, I
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agree
with the statement and believe that this is the most prolific for offenders.

There are multiple reasons to support my argument with the statement that
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criminals
should
be imparted
ability and educational
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training
and not sentencing to
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prison
. The
first
and the most compelling reason is it will
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aid
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criminals
to
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get
a job.
In other words
, most of the
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criminals
who commit
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crime
are either poor or unemployed,
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so
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training
them with vivid
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skills
and
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knowledge
will
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aid
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offenders
to earn their livelihood.
For example
, there is a culture in western India to train
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offenders
who have committed minor
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crimes
, which has
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helped
to
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reduce
such
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crime
by 5% and
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helped
around 33%
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criminals
to
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get
a job.

Another argument is that
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training
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criminal
and not sentencing them to
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prison
will assist
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offenders
to
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keep
away from
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bad
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company
. To be precise,
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prison
is the home of
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criminals
and if
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offenders
are
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kept
together they will
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make
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wrong
friends and have a higher probability to re-offend once they
are set
free.
Therefore
, imparting
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offenders
with useful abilities and
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knowledge
will cater them to
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keep
away from the
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wrong
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people
and groups.
For example
, according to a recent survey by the Southern Police Department, 65% of the
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offenders
did not indulge in
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crime
after
been trained
at the rehabilitation
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centre
.
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,
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training
aides not
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only
to
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keep
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criminals
out of
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bad
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company
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also
to
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reduce
overall
crimes.

However
, another side should not
be neglected
which claims that
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criminals
ought to be
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sent
to
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prison
. It
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must
be admitted
that
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training
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offenders
involve cost and this money can
be spent
on other crucial aspects such as education and sports.

In conclusion
, although there is a consent of monetary aspects in giving
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knowledge
and ability
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training
to
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offenders
, I
strongly
believe that imparting such
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training
will
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help
the society to
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reduce
overall
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crimes
and
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aid
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offenders
earn their living.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In the last 20 years, there have been a significant development in the field ofInformation Technology, for example, the World Wide Web and communication byemail. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effectsthan positive in th v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
347 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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