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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? v.20

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? v. 20
Despite the fact that farming methods are improved dramatically for the last decades, people around the world are suffering from starvation. This essay will discuss the issue, and will suggest several solutions to address the problem. This issue might be attributable to economical and climatic factors. Famine and food scarce in most occasions just affect the poor people. Foodstuff are always available for the rich group thanks to their purchase power which the poor and middle class underestimate the power of money when it comes to basic needs. Climate change is one of the impressive reasons why food is not adequate for everyone especially who lives in underprivileged countries. Since advent of global warming, states encounter with fluctuation in rainfall that brings about flood or drought. In African countries, for example, residents could not grow their crops due to the loss of water. In order to mitigate this problem, firstly governments should introduce some strict rules about distributing food in harsh situations like famine so that every individual could access to foodstuff. Additionally, donating food or providing it with lower price for the poor, would decrease the rate of hunger. Furthermore, politicians and leaders of affluent countries and non-profit organizations could contribute significantly to fight against hunger by giving away foods to third world countries undergoing food scarcity. In conclusion, starving from food is one of the common problems among the nations despite of developments in agriculture. Economical and climatic factors are playing important role in lack of food. Rich countries could put an end to hunger by providing wealth and resources for poor nations endangered by famine.
Despite the fact that farming methods are
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improved
dramatically
for the last decades,
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people
around the world are suffering from starvation. This essay will discuss the issue, and will suggest several solutions to address the problem.

This issue might be attributable to economical and climatic factors. Famine and
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food
scarce in most occasions
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just
affect the
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poor
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people
. Foodstuff are always available for the rich group thanks to their
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purchase
power which the
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poor
and middle
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class
underestimate the power of money when it
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comes
to basic needs. Climate
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change
is one of the impressive reasons why
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food
is not adequate for everyone
especially
who
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lives
in underprivileged
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countries
. Since advent of global warming, states encounter with fluctuation in rainfall that brings about flood or drought. In African
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countries
,
for example
, residents could not grow their crops due to the loss of water.

In order to mitigate this problem,
firstly
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governments
should introduce
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some
strict
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rules
about distributing
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food
in harsh situations like famine
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so
that every individual could access to foodstuff.
Additionally
, donating
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food
or providing it with lower price for the
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poor
, would decrease the rate of hunger.
Furthermore
, politicians and leaders of affluent
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countries
and non-profit organizations could contribute
significantly
to fight against hunger by giving away
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foods
to third world
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countries
undergoing
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food
scarcity.

In conclusion
, starving from
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food
is one of the common problems among the nations
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despite of
developments in agriculture. Economical and climatic factors are playing
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important
role in lack of
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food
. Rich
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countries
could put an
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end
to hunger by providing wealth and resources for
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poor
nations endangered by famine.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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