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Nowadays the way many people interact why each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relation ship people make Has this become a positive or negative development? v.1

Nowadays the way many people interact why each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relation ship people make Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 1
TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN RAPIDLY ENHANCING THE DEFFERENT METHODS FOR PEOPLE TO COMMUNIVATE WITHING THE WORLD. THIS REVOLUTION HAS, MADE MUCH MORE EASIER FOR EVERYONE TO REACH OUT A LOVED ONE WHO STAYS AWAY FROM THEM. FIRSTLY, THIS ESAY WILL DISCUSS HOW THIS INOVATION HAS AFFECTED THE TYPE OF RELATIONSHIP PEOPLE MAKE MOWADAYS. SECONDLY, WHY THIS REVOLUTION IN TELECOMMUNICATION CONSIDER AS DETRIMENTAL OUTCOME. ON THE ONE HAND, YOUGHS ARE MAKING SHORT TERM AND PRIMARY RELATION WITH OTHERS. THIS IS BECAUSE THEY ARE AWARE OF THAT IT IS EASY TO MAKE NEW FRIENDS THAN BEFORE. AS THE AVAILABILITY OF THE VARIOUS SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES, SUCH AS FACEBOOK, WHAT'S APP, SNAP CHAT AND SO ON. IN ADDITION TO THIS, ALSO THE VALUES AND RESPECTS FOR APRENTS AND ELDERS DECREASED SINCE THE TECHNOLOGY ARRIVED. FOR AN EXAMPLE, THE DEPARTMENT OF TELECOMMUNICATION OF THE INDIA DID A SURVEY IN 2000, WHCIH DEPICTED THAT 70% OF INDIVIDUALS ARE END UP BREAKING RELATION WITH THIER PARTNER BECAUSE OF THE LACK OF TIME FOR FAMILY. ON THE OTHER HAND, THE DEVELOPMENT OF TECH BECOMING NEGATIVE REVOLUTION DUE TO IT'S DEVASTATING EEFECTS ON RELATIONSHIPS. THE MAJOR PESSIMISTIC IMPACT IS THAT IT HAS MADE PEOPLE APART IN ONE'S PRIVATE LIFE. BECAUSE, THEY ARE BEING MORE BONDED WITH DEVISES THAN PEOPL AROUND. CONSEQUENTLY, THEY END UP WITH BREAKING UP AND FIND FOR ANOTHER PARTNER. FOR INSTANCE, ONE OF MY FRIEND SHE BREKEN UP WITH HER BOYFRIEND BECAUSE HE WAS NOT SPENDING ENOUGH TIME WITH HER AND ALWYS BUSY ON CELLPHONE. AS A RESULT, THIS IS HOW TECHNOLOGY AFFECTS A PEROPLE PERSONAL LIVES. HOWEVER, IT ALSO PROVEN TO BE A POSITIVE OUTCOME FOR BUSINESSMEN AS IT IS ALLOW THEM TO EXPAND THEIR BUSINESS WORDWIDE. IN CONCLUSION, THE TECHNOLOGY INDEED ASSIST AND INDIVIDUALS AS WELL AS SOCIETY AND GOVERNMENT IN VARIOUS DAILY TASKS. BUT I THINK EVERYTHING IT SHOULD NOT BE IN THE COST OF LOSING MORALS AND ANCIENT VALUES.
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TECHNOLOGY
HAS BEEN
RAPIDLY
ENHANCING THE
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DEFFERENT
METHODS FOR
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PEOPLE
TO
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COMMUNIVATE
WITHING THE WORLD. THIS REVOLUTION HAS, MADE MUCH
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MORE EASIER
FOR EVERYONE TO REACH OUT A
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LOVED
ONE WHO STAYS AWAY FROM THEM.
FIRSTLY
, THIS
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ESAY
WILL DISCUSS HOW THIS
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INOVATION
HAS
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AFFECTED
THE TYPE OF RELATIONSHIP
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PEOPLE
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MAKE
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MOWADAYS
.
SECONDLY
, WHY THIS REVOLUTION IN TELECOMMUNICATION CONSIDER AS DETRIMENTAL OUTCOME.

ON THE ONE HAND,
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YOUGHS
ARE MAKING SHORT TERM AND PRIMARY RELATION WITH OTHERS. THIS IS
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BECAUSE
THEY ARE AWARE OF THAT IT IS EASY TO
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MAKE
NEW FRIENDS THAN
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BEFORE
. AS THE AVAILABILITY OF THE VARIOUS SOCIAL NETWORKING SITES, SUCH AS FACEBOOK, WHAT'S APP, SNAP CHAT AND
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SO
ON.
IN ADDITION
TO THIS,
ALSO
THE VALUES AND RESPECTS FOR
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APRENTS
AND ELDERS DECREASED SINCE THE
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TECHNOLOGY
ARRIVED. FOR AN EXAMPLE, THE DEPARTMENT OF TELECOMMUNICATION OF THE INDIA DID A SURVEY IN 2000,
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WHCIH
DEPICTED THAT 70% OF INDIVIDUALS ARE
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END
UP BREAKING RELATION WITH
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THIER
PARTNER
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BECAUSE
OF THE LACK OF TIME FOR FAMILY.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, THE DEVELOPMENT OF TECH BECOMING
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NEGATIVE
REVOLUTION DUE TO
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IT'S
DEVASTATING
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EEFECTS
ON RELATIONSHIPS. THE MAJOR PESSIMISTIC IMPACT IS THAT IT HAS MADE
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PEOPLE
APART IN ONE'S PRIVATE LIFE.
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BECAUSE
, THEY ARE BEING MORE BONDED WITH DEVISES THAN
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PEOPL
AROUND.
CONSEQUENTLY
, THEY
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END
UP WITH BREAKING UP AND FIND FOR ANOTHER PARTNER.
FOR INSTANCE
, ONE OF MY FRIEND SHE
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BREKEN
UP WITH HER BOYFRIEND
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BECAUSE
HE WAS NOT SPENDING
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ENOUGH
TIME WITH HER AND
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ALWYS
BUSY ON CELLPHONE.
AS A RESULT
, THIS IS HOW
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TECHNOLOGY
AFFECTS A
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PEROPLE
PERSONAL
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LIVES
.
HOWEVER
,
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IT
ALSO
PROVEN TO BE A
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POSITIVE
OUTCOME FOR BUSINESSMEN AS IT IS
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ALLOW
THEM TO EXPAND THEIR BUSINESS
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WORDWIDE
.

IN CONCLUSION
, THE
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TECHNOLOGY
INDEED
ASSIST AND INDIVIDUALS
AS WELL
AS SOCIETY AND
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GOVERNMENT
IN VARIOUS DAILY TASKS.
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BUT
I
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THINK
EVERYTHING IT SHOULD NOT BE IN THE COST OF LOSING MORALS AND ANCIENT VALUES.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact why each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relation ship people make Has this become a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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