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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? * v.19

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? * v. 19
Agriculture & the hunger The ideal reasons behind why agriculture and farming are practised is to satiate one’s hunger. However, still there are many numbers of less privileged people suffering because of hunger. In my vision if agriculture is thriving, hunger should have been disappeared. In this essay, we shall see the reasons behind why many people still suffer in hunger and how do we bridge the gap between agriculture and hunger. There is a façade that if a country is flourishing with vegetation and agriculture, the citizens of that country will have easy access to food. But, that is not happening everywhere. Let’s take the Brazil or the Argentina, where the farming and agriculture community work tirelessly to gain good dividends. Furthermore, the monsoon never plays any spoilsport. In spite of these ideal conditions, hunger still persists and the reason is skyrocketing prices of crops which led people to kill among themselves to rob money, as they had to fight to eat proper food. In these places there is an inflation wave that peaks at unimaginable extent that pushes the prices of crops along with the prices that are further elevated by the middle-level businessmen, who make the prices of essential food commodities as highly unaffordable to the layman. This inflation is caused by the government, which is not playing any concrete role to regulate the food prices. Uncontrollable and rampant corruption right from top level till the low level bureaucrats make, the less fortunate to endure in hunger. How do we fix it? Everything can be mitigated if there is a strong will. Let’s see the Vietnam and the South Korea, these countries also suffered a similar kind of anarchic governments in the past, where people stood up against these governments and have overthrown them. Such uprisings do wonders. Now, there is a complete transparency in bureaucracy. The prices of crops are not fluctuating right from prices of seeds till the food commodities reach the public distribution shops. This regulation has been made tenable only because the corruption has been controlled with an iron fist. Furthermore, the government should open community homes to ration the food items as free for people living below poverty lines so that they could get the basic commodities from these homes after showing their meagre finances. To conclude, it is very disheartening on seeing from the school going children, blue-collar workers, old people and all suffer from hunger because of high priced food. Therefore, food prices should always be under check such that it should be made affordable to everyone. Feeding food to hunger is a basic civil amenity that one could expect from the government. Let’s join hands to make a hunger free world
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Agriculture
& the hunger

The ideal reasons behind why
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agriculture
and farming are
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practised
is to satiate one’s
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hunger
.
However
,
still
there are
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many
numbers of less privileged
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people
suffering
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because
of
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hunger
. In my vision if
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agriculture
is thriving,
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hunger
should have
been disappeared
. In this essay, we shall
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see
the reasons behind why
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many
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people
still
suffer in
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hunger
and how do we bridge the gap between
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agriculture
and hunger.

There is a façade that if a country is flourishing with vegetation and
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agriculture
, the citizens of that country will have easy access to
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food
.
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But
,
that is
not happening everywhere.
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Let
’s take the Brazil or the Argentina, where the farming and
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agriculture
community work
tirelessly
to gain
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good
dividends.
Furthermore
, the monsoon never plays any spoilsport.
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In spite of
these ideal conditions,
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hunger
still
persists and the reason is skyrocketing
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prices
of crops which led
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people
to kill among themselves to rob money, as they had to fight to eat proper
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food
. In these places there is an inflation wave that peaks at unimaginable extent that pushes the
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prices
of crops along with the
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prices
that are
further
elevated by the middle-level businessmen, who
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make
the
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prices
of essential
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food
commodities as
highly
unaffordable to the layman. This inflation
is caused
by the
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government
, which is not playing any concrete role to regulate the
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food
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prices
. Uncontrollable and rampant corruption right from
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top level
till the low level bureaucrats
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make
, the less fortunate to endure in
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hunger
. How do we
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fix
it?

Everything can
be mitigated
if there is a strong will.
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Let
’s
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see
the Vietnam and the South Korea, these countries
also
suffered a similar kind of anarchic
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governments
in the past, where
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people
stood up against these
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governments
and have overthrown them. Such uprisings do wonders.
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Now
, there is a complete transparency in bureaucracy. The
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prices
of crops are not fluctuating right from
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prices
of seeds till the
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food
commodities reach the public distribution shops. This regulation has
been made
tenable
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only
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because
the corruption has
been controlled
with an iron fist.
Furthermore
, the
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government
should open community homes to ration the
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food
items as free for
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people
living below poverty lines
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so
that they could
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get
the basic commodities from these homes after showing their
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meagre
finances.

To conclude
, it is
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very
disheartening on seeing from the school going children, blue-collar workers,
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old
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people
and all suffer from
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hunger
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because
of high priced
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food
.
Therefore
,
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food
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prices
should always be under
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check
such that it should
be made
affordable to everyone. Feeding
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food
to
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hunger
is a basic civil amenity that one could
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expect
from the
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government
.
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Let
’s
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join
hands to
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make
a
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hunger
free
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world
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? * v. 19

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
451 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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