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In some societies, more and more people choose to live on their own. What are the reasons people choose to do this? Is it a positive or a negative trend? v.1

In some societies, more and more people choose to live on their own. What are the reasons people choose to do this? Is it a positive or a negative trend? v. 1
Some people acclimatize to inhabit in their maternal country. They do not like any change in their lives. People must alter their lifestyle by experiencing living on modern lands. People in some areas pick out to reside where they were born whilst a lot of regions can be selected to grow up with millions of people. The most individuals in handful associations opt for dwelling in their native communities. They live with their own family, and they have a lot of friends, which spend the most of their daily time with. They accustom to their lifestyles, and they have a lot of daily activities which are routine. These people are familiar with system of transportation, and they can approach everywhere more quickly. These individuals know the most significant laws that they have to respect them and follow the government instructions. It leads to make their neighbourhood more friendly. They have to live in a better condition and make themselves more comfortable by changing their countries. Not only might people want to live on their own hometown, but also they can try to settle in modern communities to dwell. It can be a poor quality proceeding because most people can conversion their associations and get access to advanced equipment which is one of the most crucial objects when you make a choice to live there. People can get acquainted with foreign cultures, and they can learn numerous fantastic subjects from them. Furthermore, they will make numerous superb friends as they had in their own countries. People who pick to reside in their country is a minus process and it is a mutable mater and people can shift it more easily. Despite residing in a mainland in scattering countries might be chosen by some individuals, living in precursor areas will lead to a high quality lifestyle for everybody. Most individuals have to change the style of their lives by choosing a high-tech area. It will be more prevalent in the next years.
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country
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change
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lives
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a lot of
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to grow up with millions of
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people
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individuals
in handful associations opt for dwelling in their native communities. They
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live
with their
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family, and they have
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a lot of
friends, which spend the most of their daily time with. They accustom to their lifestyles, and they have
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a lot of
daily activities which are routine. These
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people
are familiar with system of transportation, and they can approach everywhere more
quickly
. These
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individuals
know the most significant laws that they
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have to
respect them and follow the
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government
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their
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hometown,
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can conversion their associations and
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access to advanced equipment which is one of the most crucial objects when you
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live
there.
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can
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acquainted with foreign cultures, and they can learn numerous fantastic subjects from them.
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make
numerous superb friends as they had in their
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own
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countries
.
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who pick to reside in their
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country
is a minus process and it is a mutable mater and
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people
can shift it more
easily
.

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countries
might
be chosen
by
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some
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individuals
, living in precursor areas will lead to a high quality lifestyle for everybody. Most
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individuals
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have to
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change
the style of their
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lives
by choosing a high-tech area. It will be more prevalent in the
next
years.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some societies, more and more people choose to live on their own. What are the reasons people choose to do this? Is it a positive or a negative trend? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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