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In some parts of the world, people have become more focused on themselves than their communities. What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved?

In some parts of the world, people have become more focused on themselves than their communities. What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved? v. 2
Nowadays people all over the world are being more focused on themselves rather than surrounding communities. Therefore, various issues can be triggered in our society and it could involve all life areas like relationships and ecology. One cause might be a small problem that can lead to a huge ecological disaster because people don't think about the consequences of their actions and what reflection these actions have. Let us give the example: someone just walks down the street and smokes the tobacco, after smoking, person ashes the cigarette and throws the butt away. The situation is shown by only one smoker, but globally there are more than 800 million people in the world who smoke, by the way, in developing nations tobacco consumption continues to rise. Cigarette butts may seem small, but with several trillion butts littered every year, the toxic chemicals add up. As for the result of the dumping tiny and as for one view innocuous things can be really big trouble for lots of people. It is undeniable that worldwide friendship and peacefulness which may be damaged by an individual's arrogance and being a cold shoulder to everyone. Certainly, it means that people would stop communicating with each other due to not understanding and apathy. Accordingly, less communicating with others will result in making us antisocial that can provide the human being in the early stages of the ladder of evolution in the prehistoric period when only some couples of people had a contact. Undoubtedly, the resolution is clear: we all have to talk and communicate with other people because we all need that someone who gets us like no more else, we all need a soul to rely on, a friend through the highs and the lows
Nowadays
people
all over the world are being more focused on themselves
rather
than surrounding communities.
Therefore
, various issues can
be triggered
in our society and it could involve all life areas like relationships and ecology.

One cause might be a
small
problem that can lead to a huge ecological disaster
because
people
don't
think
about the consequences of their actions and what reflection these actions have.
Let
us give the example: someone
just
walks down the street and smokes the tobacco, after smoking, person ashes the cigarette and throws the butt away. The situation
is shown
by
only
one smoker,
but
globally there are more than 800 million
people
in the world who smoke, by the way, in developing
nations
tobacco consumption continues to rise. Cigarette butts may seem
small
,
but
with several trillion butts littered every year, the toxic chemicals
add
up. As for the result of the dumping tiny and as for one view innocuous things can be
really
big
trouble for lots of
people
.

It is undeniable that worldwide friendship and peacefulness which may
be damaged
by an individual's arrogance and being a
cold
shoulder to everyone.
Certainly
, it means that
people
would
stop
communicating with each other due to not understanding and apathy.
Accordingly
, less communicating with others will result in making us antisocial that can provide the human being in the early stages of the ladder of evolution in the prehistoric period when
only
some
couples of
people
had a contact.

Undoubtedly
, the resolution is
clear
: we all
have to
talk and communicate with other
people
because
we all need that someone who
gets
us like no more else, we all need a soul to rely on, a friend through the highs and the lows
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IELTS essay In some parts of the world, people have become more focused on themselves than their communities. What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
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