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In some parts of the world it is increasingly popular to research the history of one's own family. Why do people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development? v.3

In some parts of the world it is increasingly popular to research the history of one's own family. Why do people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development? v. 3
There is a rising trend in researching the backgrounds of one' s own family. In my opinion, It is understandable for people to do that, and to some extent, It has both negative and positive impacts on humans. There is a reasonable argument why people want to spend time on studying about their own families. It is true that most popular literature projects including poetry and music in the world are discovered by authors' next generations. Thus, If people research their family history, there may be a chance that they could explore some worldwide legacies. For example, The journey to the West, one of the most successful books of all time, was discovered ten years after the writer' death. Despite the positive effect mentioned above, the trend of studying about family history could be seen as negative and positive. The downside of this trend is that the chance of finding some legacies which contribute to the spiritual value of humankind is low. As a result, It is the waste of money and time to carry out such research. However, It is beneficial for people from an individuals perspective when they can find out about the traditional value of their own family which evokes the pride in each person. In conclusion, Although there is a reasonable purpose for someone to carry out the research of their own family, It might have adverse effect, so that we should consider carefully before decide to do
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people
to do that, and to
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extent, It has both
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negative
and
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impacts on humans.

There is a reasonable argument why
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people
want to spend time on studying about their
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own
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families
. It is true that most popular literature projects including poetry and music in the world
are discovered
by
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next
generations.
Thus
, If
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people
research their
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history, there may be a chance that they could explore
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some
worldwide legacies.
For example
, The journey to the West, one of the most successful books of all time,
was discovered
ten years after the
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#039; death.

Despite the
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positive
effect mentioned above, the trend of studying about
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family
history could be
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seen
as
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negative
and
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positive
. The downside of this trend is that the chance of finding
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some
legacies which contribute to the spiritual value of humankind is low.
As a result
, It is the waste of money and time to carry out such research.
However
, It is beneficial for
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people
from an
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individuals
perspective when they can find out about the traditional value of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
which evokes the pride in each person.

In conclusion
, Although there is a reasonable purpose for someone to carry out the research of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
, It might have adverse effect,
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so
that we should consider
carefully
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before
decide to do
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IELTS essay In some parts of the world it is increasingly popular to research the history of one's own family. Why do people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
241 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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