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Due to poorer countries experiencing a brain drain they are seeing many professionals such as doctors and teachers leaving to work in more developed countries What problems do this cause What solutions can be suggested to deal with this situation v.2

Due to poorer countries experiencing a brain drain they are seeing many professionals such as doctors and teachers leaving to work in more developed countries What problems do this cause What solutions can be suggested to deal with this situation v. 2
In many developing countries, rising influx of skilled academics leaving in search of better pay; increased socioeconomic benefits, and the chance to earn citizenship in a developed country. This essay will examine the impact this has had on the more poverty stricken countries and suggest how this situation could be improved. To initiate with problems, the foremost with skilled professionals, such as doctors and teachers leaving is that it deprives the country of people who are necessary to its survival. In other words, a shortage of doctors in hospitals could lead to them being severely understaffed, even though they have the trained doctors and nurses who are local and willing to work. In addition, some academic institutions can also suffer, with a dearth of skilled teachers in highly desirable subjects: maths, science and languages. Many a professional desires better remuneration and working conditions, leaving in search of a better lifestyle. For example, a study from England University showed that in London in 2014, 75% of graduates had applied to work in the UK and the USA. A possible solution to this problem is for skilled professionals to enter into mandatory service in their origin country, before being able to migrate. To be more precise, those who earn their qualifications from state universities ought to work in service to their country for a set amount of time, even though they are ready for the wider workplace. This would address the shortage of workers in hospitals and schools, meanwhile gaining experience, in order to give something back to their community and country. For instance, in Romania, it is common practice for graduates from state-funded university courses to work in areas where their services are needed for a minimum of two years before they are able to apply to work abroad. Summing up, with the rising demand for nurses, doctors and teachers in economically rich countries such as the UK, more and more people are leaving their poor origin countries in search of better pay, working conditions and benefits. It is, therefore, imperative for governments to put appropriate schemes into place, with mandatory service for state-funded degree holders.
In
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many
developing
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countries
, rising influx of
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skilled
academics leaving in search of
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better
pay; increased socioeconomic benefits, and the chance to earn citizenship in a developed
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country
. This essay will examine the impact this has had on the more
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poverty stricken
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countries
and suggest how this situation could be
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improved
.

To initiate with problems, the foremost with
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skilled
professionals, such as
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doctors
and teachers leaving is that it deprives the
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country
of
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people
who are necessary to its survival.
In other words
, a shortage of
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doctors
in hospitals could lead to them being
severely
understaffed,
even though
they have the trained
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doctors
and nurses who are local and willing to
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work
.
In addition
,
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some
academic institutions can
also
suffer, with a dearth of
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skilled
teachers in
highly
desirable subjects:
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maths
, science and languages.
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Many
a professional desires
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better
remuneration and working conditions, leaving in search of a
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better
lifestyle.
For example
, a study from England University
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showed
that in London in 2014, 75% of graduates had applied to
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work
in the UK and the USA.

A possible solution to this problem is for
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skilled
professionals to enter into mandatory
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service
in their origin
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country
,
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before
being able to migrate. To be more precise, those who earn their qualifications from state universities ought to
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work
in
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service
to their
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country
for a set amount of time,
even though
they are ready for the wider workplace. This would address the shortage of workers in hospitals and schools, meanwhile gaining experience, in order to give something back to their community and
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country
.
For instance
, in Romania, it is common practice for graduates from state-funded university courses to
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work
in areas where their
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services
are needed
for a minimum of two years
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before
they are able to apply to
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work
abroad.

Summing up, with the rising demand for nurses,
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doctors
and teachers in
economically
rich
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countries
such as the UK, more and more
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people
are leaving their poor origin
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countries
in search of
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better
pay, working conditions and benefits. It is,
therefore
, imperative for
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governments
to put appropriate schemes into place, with mandatory
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service
for state-funded degree holders.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Due to poorer countries experiencing a brain drain they are seeing many professionals such as doctors and teachers leaving to work in more developed countries What problems do this cause What solutions can be suggested to deal with this situation v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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