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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this v.35

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this v. 35
In some countries, it is believed that young people should take a gap year between finishing high school and starting university studies. This trend would create certain benefits, but there will also be some drawbacks. On the one hand, it is clear that taking a gap year would bring about several advantages. One evident strength is that it would help teenagers relaxed after studying hard. During this time, they can take up a sport they like or do something prohibited while studying for an exam. Consequently, they have not felt stress before going to the universities. Another reason is that young people can improve themselves. Because when they travel to other countries for a year, they can have a chance to gain the knowledge about new cultures, local people and pick up new languages. Last but not least, the one-year gap after high school can also give them the time and experience to make tough decisions, like deciding what they truly want to study or what career to pursue On the other hand, there are some obvious disadvantages that would arise. First and foremost, taking a gap year means that you do not study for one year. As a result, their study skills may have diminished, making it harder for them to adjust to life in education when going to universities. This can be particularly true for mathematics or physics students, or any course that involves complex theoretical processes and techniques that may not be used outside of the classroom. Second, after going abroad, they might find that they did not get the experience they were hoping for, which makes them feel regretful. And it can be easily seen that taking a gap year is disadvantageous for these people. In conclusion, the one-year gap has both advantages and disadvantages.
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countries, it
is believed
that young
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people
should take a
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gap
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year
between finishing high school and starting university
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studies
. This trend would create certain benefits,
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but
there will
also
be
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some
drawbacks.

On the one hand, it is
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clear
that taking a
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gap
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year
would bring about several advantages. One evident strength is that it would
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help
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teenagers
relaxed after studying
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hard
. During this time, they can take up a sport they like or do something prohibited while studying for an exam.
Consequently
, they have not felt
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stress
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before
going to the universities. Another reason is that young
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people
can
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improve
themselves.
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Because
when they travel to other countries for a
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year
, they can have a chance to gain the knowledge about new cultures, local
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people
and pick up new languages. Last
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but
not least, the one-year
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gap
after high school can
also
give them the time and experience to
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make
tough decisions, like deciding what they
truly
want to
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study
or what career to pursue

On the other hand
, there are
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some
obvious disadvantages that would arise.
First
and foremost, taking a
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gap
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year
means that you do not
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study
for one
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year
.
As a result
, their
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study
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skills
may have diminished, making it harder for them to adjust to life in education when going to universities. This can be
particularly
true for mathematics or physics students, or any course that involves complex theoretical processes and techniques that may not be
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used
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outside of
the classroom. Second, after going abroad, they might find that they did not
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get
the experience they were hoping for, which
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makes
them feel regretful. And it can be
easily
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seen
that taking a
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gap
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year
is disadvantageous for these
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people
.

In conclusion
, the one-year
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gap
has both advantages and disadvantages.
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IELTS essay In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this v. 35

Essay
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7.5
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