It is certainly true that the number of students who intend to work before entering have increased considerably. This is because, in some countries, students have been encouraged to such behaviour based on an immense amount of satisfaction could be gained with work in early age. Whereas, other countries strongly against for this sort of reckless advice. This essay will discuss this issue in both positive and negative sides.
A common criticism of motivating young people to work or travel before the university’s stage is confusing them to choose which field of study suitable them well. One reason for this, jobs would probably change pupil’s view contemporary owing to a factor of money, which to a large extent encourage student to go for a high paid field rather than others which really they talent in. Another object of this is a detrimental effect which influences catastrophically on students’ personality which absolutely unprepared for such stressful situation.
In spite of those negative effects, working and travelling abroad before going into collage have brought much more benefits. One such benefit is helping them to be self-assured and more confident in their capability not just in work but also in all life terms. As evidence of that, many surveys indicate that who works have taken more responsibilities alongside with more professional abilities in education particularly in analytical and cognitive skills.
In conclusion, although several communities to prevent young people work under eighteen, I am strongly in favour encouraging them to work in specific positions definitely under a regulated and coordinated system monitoring this process to ensure a more effective results in students’ abilities before starting university.
It is
certainly
true that the number of
students
who intend to
work
before
entering have increased
considerably
. This is
because
, in
some
countries,
students
have
been encouraged
to such
behaviour
based on an immense amount of satisfaction could
be gained
with
work
in early age. Whereas, other countries
strongly
against for this sort of reckless advice. This essay will discuss this issue in both
positive
and
negative
sides.
A common criticism of motivating young
people
to
work
or travel
before
the university’s stage is confusing them to choose which field of study suitable them well. One reason for this, jobs would
probably
change
pupil’s view contemporary owing to a factor of money, which to a large extent encourage
student
to go for a high paid field
rather
than others which
really
they talent
in. Another object of this is a detrimental effect which influences
catastrophically
on
students’
personality which
absolutely
unprepared for such stressful situation.
In spite of
those
negative
effects, working and travelling abroad
before
going into collage have brought much more benefits. One such benefit is helping them to be self-assured and more confident in their capability not
just
in
work
but
also
in all life terms. As evidence of that,
many
surveys indicate that who works have taken more responsibilities alongside with more professional abilities in education
particularly
in analytical and cognitive
skills
.
In conclusion
, although several communities to
prevent
young
people
work
under eighteen, I am
strongly
in
favour
encouraging them to
work
in specific positions definitely under a regulated and coordinated system monitoring this process to ensure a more effective results in
students’
abilities
before
starting university.
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