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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. v.5

In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. v. 5
How do people become an artist? This question is a really fashionable trend in many parts of the world. Talentless people become an artist because of luck, a good opportunity, and networking. These reasons are commonly used by artists who are popular with this trend. I tend to disagree with this issue because becoming an artist is not about luck. I will outline the reasons and examples to support my arguments. The job of an artist is an honourable job. S/he is public figures whom people always stare on their performance both in their real life and on their stages. Therefore, they need to give their best in their life to entertain people. They have to make a great preparation and hard work before becoming an artist, so their performance will not disappoint their fans. For example, singers should train their voice, learn about tunes and songs before their voice are enjoyed by many people. A singer who gets that "singer" title without ability will gain the bad judge even s/he produce a good song by the citizen. In addition, artists who inexpert in their field are usually cannot survive for a long time, because they cannot perform a good performance. Take YouTube artists as examples, they only famous for several months and disappear because they lack the capability. It is true that everyone has their own luck and deserves to pursue the chance, but it cannot be denied that for a particular job such as artist need special ability and capability. To sum up, I must say that people have to prepare themselves well before they act as public figures to survive in that industry. In my opinion, as a nature talent, being an artist is really a special career, therefore I disagree that people get that job only because of luck and no attempt to get that position.
How do
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become an
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? This question is a
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many
parts of the world.
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Talentless
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people
become an
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artist
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because
of luck, a
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good
opportunity, and networking. These reasons are
commonly
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used
by
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artists
who are popular with this trend. I tend to disagree with this issue
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because
becoming an
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artist
is not about luck. I will outline the reasons and examples to support my arguments.

The
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job
of an
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artist
is an
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honourable
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job
. S/he is public figures whom
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people
always stare on their performance both in their real life and on their stages.
Therefore
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people
. They
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have to
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make
a great preparation and
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hard
work
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before
becoming an
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artist
,
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so
their performance will not disappoint their fans.
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, singers should train their voice, learn about tunes and songs
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before
their voice
are enjoyed
by
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many
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people
. A singer who
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singer
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title without ability will gain the
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produce
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good
song by the citizen.

In addition
,
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artists
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good
performance. Take YouTube
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artists
as examples, they
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only
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famous
for several months and disappear
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because
they lack the capability.

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luck and deserves to pursue the chance,
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but
it cannot
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need special ability and capability.

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people
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have to
prepare themselves well
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before
they act as public figures to survive in that industry. In my opinion, as a nature talent, being an
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artist
is
really
a special career,
therefore
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people
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get
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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