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In some countries the quality of life in large cities is declining Why do you think this is happening What measures can be taken to stop it v.2

In some countries the quality of life in large cities is declining Why do you think this is happening What measures can be taken to stop it v. 2
The quality of life is deteriorating in big cities of various nations. The ever increasing inflation and overpopulation are the primary reasons behind it. However, various steps can be taken to control this decline. To begin with, people are continuously drifting from rural to urban areas in the search of a job and because of all the latest amenities present in the short distance, they decide to settle in the cities only. This consequently results in, contamination and shortage of drinking water, air, and noise pollution because of the increase in a vehicle on road hence, each and every road has become overloaded with traffic. The overpopulation has increased the demand for the product and rents which in turn resulted in inflation and to meet the family basic needs one has to work overtime and do not get enough time to enjoy with the family. The inadequate rest time results in stress, brain hemorrhage and cancer like issues because of pollution. However, these problems can be curbed by acting or certain plan such as the government should generate optimum job opportunities in the rural areas which definitely help in dismissing their migration rate. Apart from this, people should be encouraged to use public vehicles instead of private by levying steep tax on personal vehicles. Additionally, the government should make legislation that can assure that one needs not to work overtime to earn bread and increase their salaries. Moreover, they should have enough time for other recreational activities which can make them fit. To conclude, the standard of living in the urban area is getting worse due to the drastic increase in the number of people and has increased the problems like unhealthy environment and high life expenditures in large cities. However, some measures should be taken to such as by motivating people to use public transport instead of private and making law for the working class salaries are an apt example to attain the required results.
The quality of life is deteriorating in
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big
cities of various nations. The
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ever increasing
inflation and overpopulation are the primary reasons behind it.
However
, various steps can
be taken
to control this decline.

To
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begin
with,
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people
are
continuously
drifting from rural to urban areas in the search of a job and
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because
of all the latest amenities present in the short distance, they decide to settle in the cities
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only
. This
consequently
results in, contamination and shortage of drinking water, air, and noise pollution
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because
of the increase in a vehicle on road
hence
, each and every road has become overloaded with traffic. The overpopulation has increased the demand for the product and rents which in turn resulted in inflation and to
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meet
the family basic needs one
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has to
work overtime and do not
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get
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enough
time to enjoy with the family. The inadequate rest time results in
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stress
, brain hemorrhage and cancer like issues
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because
of pollution.

However
, these problems can
be curbed
by acting or certain plan such as the
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government
should generate optimum job opportunities in the rural areas which definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in dismissing their migration rate. Apart from this,
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people
should
be encouraged
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public vehicles
instead
of private by levying steep tax on personal vehicles.
Additionally
, the
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government
should
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make
legislation that can assure that one needs not to work overtime to earn bread and increase their salaries.
Moreover
, they should have
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enough
time for other recreational activities which can
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make
them fit.

To conclude
, the standard of living in the urban area is getting worse due to the drastic increase in the number of
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people
and has increased the problems like unhealthy environment and high life expenditures in large cities.
However
,
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some
measures should
be taken
to such as by motivating
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transport
instead
of private and making law for the working
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class
salaries are an apt example to attain the required results.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries the quality of life in large cities is declining Why do you think this is happening What measures can be taken to stop it v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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