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In some countries the quality of life in larger cities is declining. Why do you think this is happening? What measures can be taken to stop it? v.1

In some countries the quality of life in larger cities is declining. Why do you think this is happening? What measures can be taken to stop it? v. 1
These days it is a noticeable issue on how to judge knowledge and performance of students. Some people stick to the point that evaluating students through a formal exam is an effective way to appraise a student's performance. However, some groups believe that continual assessment like a class presentation and projects is beneficial too. I am agreed with both groups. Firstly, evaluating a student’s carrying out with a formal exam can help tutors understand the ability of their pupils. In addition, teachers can recognize when students have a specific time how can improve their skills and knowledge to achieve a high score. For example, pupils learn time management skill as well as studying and answering questions at the limited time. Therefore, exam can be helpful for both students and teachers because students alert their weakness and forte as well as teachers alter their methods of teaching to enhance student’s ability. On the opposite side, continual appraisal, such as course work, project, assignment and class activities are important to examine individual activities that which students are best in class; as an example, if students have enough performance and practical knowledge during a term, so a teacher consider and evaluate the merit of students. Consequently, continual assessment and practical work enable students to learn a topic deeply and learn new and cognitive skills such as writing, listening and communication skills. In conclusion, due to the teacher’s experience both evaluations have their own benefits for students. Although, it cannot be possible to judge pupils with only one way, so tutors should use both methods including formal exam and project.
These days it is a noticeable issue on how to judge knowledge and performance of
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students
.
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Some
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people
stick to the point that evaluating
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students
through a formal exam is an effective way to appraise a student's performance.
However
,
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some
groups believe that continual assessment like a
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class
presentation and projects is beneficial too. I am
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agreed
with both groups.

Firstly
, evaluating a
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student’s
carrying out with a formal exam can
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help
tutors understand the ability of their pupils.
In addition
,
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teachers
can recognize when
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students
have a specific time how can
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improve
their
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skills
and knowledge to achieve a high score.
For example
, pupils learn time management
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skill
as well
as studying and answering questions at the limited time.
Therefore
, exam can be helpful for both
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students
and
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teachers
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because
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students
alert their weakness and forte
as well
as
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teachers
alter their methods of teaching
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to enhance
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student’s
ability.

On the opposite side, continual appraisal, such as course work, project, assignment and
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class
activities are
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important
to examine individual activities that which
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students
are best in
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class
; as an example, if
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students
have
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enough
performance and practical knowledge during a term,
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so
a
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teacher
consider and evaluate the merit of
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students
.
Consequently
, continual assessment and practical work enable
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students
to learn a topic
deeply
and learn new and cognitive
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skills
such as writing, listening and communication
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skills
.

In conclusion
, due to the
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teacher’s
experience both evaluations have their
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own
benefits for
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students
. Although, it cannot be possible to judge pupils with
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only
one way,
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so
tutors should
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use
both methods including formal exam and project.
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IELTS essay In some countries the quality of life in larger cities is declining. Why do you think this is happening? What measures can be taken to stop it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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