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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead v. 2
It has been a matter of intense debate for quite some time now as to what should be done with the old building. It is asserted by some people that maintenance of ancient and historical buildings requires a huge amount of money hence, instead of wasting that money on outdated building new should be constructed. In my opinion, the old buildings should be preserved and maintained. There are a lot of benefits to preserving old historical art and ancient history. To begin with, first and foremost it, they signify the magnificent history and culture of ancient society. For instance, the Ajanta and Ellora cave of India is the biggest example of the preservation of historical culture. These ancient monuments also help in boosting tourism in the region hence, it is required to maintain them in a proper manner so they might not lose their busy. Secondly, they create lots of employment opportunities for local and other which means that they help in the eradication of the most prevailing problem that is unemployment. Therefore, if there would be better employment opportunities then people can easily participate in the economic growth of the country. The other advantages of saving these old buildings are they can be used for other purposes if cannot be utilized as a tourist place. For instance, the king palace of Faridkot has been converted into a big hospital, the Umedh Bhawan in Rajasthan has been transformed as the hotel which helps in generating revenue for the state government. Hence, they generate double revenue that their maintenance cost. To conclude, preservation of the historical building not only enhance the tourism of the country but also help in generating employment and also accelerate economic growth.
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as to what should
be done
with the
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old
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building
. It
is asserted
by
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some
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people
that maintenance of
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ancient
and
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historical
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buildings
requires a huge amount of money
hence
,
instead
of wasting that money on outdated
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building
new should
be constructed
. In my opinion, the
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old
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buildings
should
be preserved
and maintained.

There are
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a lot of
benefits to preserving
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old
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historical
art and
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ancient
history. To
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begin
with,
first
and foremost it, they signify the magnificent history and culture of
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ancient
society.
For instance
, the
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Ajanta
and
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Ellora
cave of India is the biggest example of the preservation of
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historical
culture. These
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ancient
monuments
also
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help
in boosting tourism in the region
hence
, it
is required
to maintain them
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in a proper manner
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so
they might not lose their busy.
Secondly
, they create lots of employment opportunities for local and other which means that they
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help
in the eradication of the most prevailing problem
that is
unemployment.
Therefore
, if there would be better employment opportunities then
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people
can
easily
participate in the economic growth of the country.

The other advantages of saving these
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old
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buildings
are they can be
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used
for other purposes if cannot
be utilized
as a tourist place.
For instance
, the king palace of
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Faridkot
has
been converted
into a
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big
hospital, the
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Umedh
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Bhawan
in Rajasthan has
been transformed
as the hotel which
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helps
in generating revenue for the state
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government
.
Hence
, they generate double revenue that their maintenance cost.

To conclude
, preservation of the
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historical
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building
not
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only
enhance the tourism of the country
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but
also
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help
in generating employment and
also
accelerate economic growth.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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