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In some countries, the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem. v.8

In some countries, the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem. v. 8
The number of visitors who have a visit to art galleries is decreasing in a number of countries. The cause is the fact that people find arts meaningless. However, this problem can be solved by educating citizens about the arts, and reducing the ticket prices of galleries. Art galleries has lost their popularity over recent years in some countries. The reason is that most people think that fine artworks are pointless as well as insignificant. For example, a survey conducted by the National Arts and Crafts Organization showed that the majority of people do not prefer to visit an art gallery because they think that they do not understand the idea behind artworks, especially modern and abstract. In addition to this, the survey revealed that people believe that the ticket prices of art exhibitions which are held in the galleries are expensive. Therefore, we should mainly focus on how to promote people to visit art galleries regularly. There are some solutions associated with the given problems. Firstly, the association of government and art organizations educate people about the importance of the arts. For instance, it can be made promotional films, which depict the importance of art, by these institutions in order to raise the awareness of arts and crafts. Secondly, it should be decreased the ticket prices to increase the number of the visitor. To illustrate, the art galleries and museums gained popularity in Denmark after reducing the entry fees for cultural centres. Thus, these two solutions would be effective ways to promote visiting an art gallery among individual In conclusion, the loss of popularity of art galleries became a growing concern over the last years. Despite the main reasons like the low level of understanding of the arts and ticket price, the art education for citizens, and reducing the ticket prices would play an important role in growing the number of visitors.
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of visitors who have a visit to
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art
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galleries
is decreasing in a
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number
of countries. The cause is the fact that
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people
find
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arts
meaningless.
However
, this problem can
be solved
by educating citizens about the
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arts
, and reducing the
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ticket
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prices
of galleries.

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galleries
has lost their popularity over recent years in
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some
countries. The reason is that most
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people
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think
that fine artworks are pointless
as well
as insignificant.
For example
, a survey conducted by the National
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Arts
and Crafts Organization
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showed
that the majority of
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people
do not prefer to visit an
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art
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gallery
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because
they
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idea
behind artworks,
especially
modern and abstract.
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to this, the survey revealed that
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people
believe that the
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ticket
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prices
of
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exhibitions which
are held
in the
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galleries
are expensive.
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mainly
focus on how to promote
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people
to visit
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art
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galleries
regularly
.

There are
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some
solutions associated with the
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problems.
Firstly
, the association of
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government
and
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art
organizations educate
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people
about the importance of the
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arts
.
For instance
, it can
be made
promotional films, which depict the importance of
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art
, by these institutions in order to raise the awareness of
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arts
and crafts.
Secondly
, it should
be decreased
the
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ticket
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prices
to increase the
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number
of the visitor. To illustrate, the
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art
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galleries
and museums gained popularity in Denmark after reducing the entry fees for cultural
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centres
.
Thus
, these two solutions would be effective ways to promote visiting an
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art
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gallery
among individual

In conclusion
, the loss of popularity of
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art
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galleries
became a growing concern over the last years. Despite the main reasons like the low level of understanding of the
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arts
and
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ticket
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price
, the
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art
education for citizens, and reducing the
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ticket
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prices
would play an
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important
role in growing the
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number
of visitors.
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IELTS essay In some countries, the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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