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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? v.19

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? v. 19
IN THIS MODERN ERA, WE ARE SO BUSY THAT WE DO NOT HAVE TIME TO COOK FOOD AT HOME AND PREFER TO EAT FOOD OUTSIDE WHICH IS UNHEALTHY. THIS IS CREATING SOME PROBLEMS LIKE OBESITY AND DECLINING THE LEVEL FOR FITNESS AND HEALTH. I BELIEVE, THIS IS ALL HAPPENING BECAUSE PEOPLE SPEND THEIR MOST OF TIME AT HOME OR WORK AND EAT JUNK FOOD. THERE ARE SOME SOLUTIONS OF THESE PROBLEMS SUCH AS EATING HEALTY FOOD AND DOING SOME EXERCISES. TO BEGIN WITH, PEOPLE ARE SO BUSY WITH THEIR WORK. IN OTHER WORDS, THEY SPEND THEIR HIGHEST AMOUNT OF TIME AT WORK PLACE SO, THEY DO NOT HAVE MUCH TIME FOR COOKING FOOD. THEY PREFER TO BUY FOOD FROM DIFFERENT PLACES FOR EXAMPLE, RESTAURANTS, BARS, COFFEE SHOPS AND SUPERMARKETS, WHICH IS ALREADY PREPARED BY CHEFS, BUT THIS TYPE OF FOOD IS UNHEALTHY BECAUSE THEY CONSUME A LOT OF THEIR ITEMS OF DAY BEFORE AND SOMETIMES USE EXPIRED MATERIALS. HOWEVER, NOT ONLY FOOD EATEN BY OUTSIDE CAUSES, SYMPTOMS, BUT IT IS ALSO AFFECTED BY LAZYNESS IN PEOPLE. NOWADAYS, THEY LIKE TO PLAY OR CHAT ON COMPUTERS BY STAYING AT HOME WITHOUT DOING OUTDOOR ACTIVITIES WHICH LEADS TO INCREASE THEIR WEIGHT AND CREATE OTHER PROBLEMS FOR THEIR HEALTH. HOWEVER, ALL THESE PROBLEMS CAN BE TACKLED BY IF PEOPLE START COOKING FOOD AT HOME, WHICH IS HEALTHY AND MADE BY ACCORDING TO THEIR FAVORITE INGREDIENTS. SECOND SOLUTION IS THAT, PEOPLE SHOUD TAKE PART IN OUTSIDE ACTIVITIES SUCH AS PLAYING FOOTBALL, CRICKET INSTEAD OF STAYING AT HOME IN THEIR FREE TIME. THEY CAN ALSO DO SOME FITNESS EXERCISES LIKE JOGGING, CYCLING AND SO MANY OTHER. THUS, THESE ALL CAN HELP THEM TO BE FIT AND LIVE HEALTHY LIFE WITHOUT ANY SYMPTOMS. TO SUMMARIZE, PEOPLE ARE BEING OBESE BECAUSE THEY EAT MORE OUTSIDE THAN COOKING BY THEMSELVES DUE TO THEIR UPLOAD WORK. I THINK, THEY COULD SOLVE THIS IF THEY DO EXERCISES AND EAT FOOD COOKED AT HOME. THEY COULD BECOME HEALTHY IF THEY PARTICIPATE IN OUDOOR ACTIVITIES.
IN THIS MODERN ERA, WE ARE
SO
BUSY THAT WE DO NOT HAVE
TIME
TO COOK
FOOD
AT HOME AND PREFER TO
EAT
FOOD
OUTSIDE
WHICH IS UNHEALTHY. THIS IS CREATING
SOME
PROBLEMS
LIKE OBESITY AND DECLINING THE LEVEL FOR FITNESS AND HEALTH. I BELIEVE, THIS IS ALL HAPPENING
BECAUSE
PEOPLE
SPEND THEIR MOST OF
TIME
AT HOME OR
WORK
AND
EAT
JUNK
FOOD
. THERE ARE
SOME
SOLUTIONS OF THESE
PROBLEMS
SUCH AS EATING
HEALTY
FOOD
AND DOING
SOME
EXERCISES.

TO
BEGIN
WITH,
PEOPLE
ARE
SO
BUSY WITH THEIR
WORK
.
IN OTHER WORDS
, THEY SPEND THEIR HIGHEST AMOUNT OF
TIME
AT
WORK
PLACE
SO
, THEY DO NOT HAVE MUCH
TIME
FOR COOKING
FOOD
. THEY PREFER TO
BUY
FOOD
FROM
DIFFERENT
PLACES
FOR EXAMPLE
, RESTAURANTS, BARS, COFFEE SHOPS AND SUPERMARKETS, WHICH IS ALREADY PREPARED BY CHEFS,
BUT
THIS TYPE OF
FOOD
IS UNHEALTHY
BECAUSE
THEY CONSUME
A LOT OF
THEIR ITEMS OF DAY
BEFORE
AND
SOMETIMES
USE
EXPIRED MATERIALS.
HOWEVER
, NOT
ONLY
FOOD
EATEN BY
OUTSIDE
CAUSES, SYMPTOMS,
BUT
IT IS
ALSO
AFFECTED
BY
LAZYNESS
IN
PEOPLE
. NOWADAYS, THEY LIKE TO PLAY OR CHAT ON COMPUTERS BY STAYING AT HOME WITHOUT DOING OUTDOOR ACTIVITIES WHICH LEADS TO INCREASE THEIR WEIGHT AND CREATE OTHER
PROBLEMS
FOR THEIR HEALTH.

HOWEVER
, ALL THESE
PROBLEMS
CAN
BE TACKLED
BY IF
PEOPLE
START
COOKING
FOOD
AT HOME, WHICH IS HEALTHY AND MADE BY ACCORDING TO THEIR FAVORITE INGREDIENTS. SECOND SOLUTION IS THAT,
PEOPLE
SHOUD
TAKE PART
IN
OUTSIDE
ACTIVITIES SUCH AS PLAYING FOOTBALL, CRICKET
INSTEAD
OF STAYING AT HOME IN THEIR FREE
TIME
. THEY CAN
ALSO
DO
SOME
FITNESS EXERCISES LIKE JOGGING, CYCLING AND
SO
MANY
OTHER
.
THUS
, THESE ALL CAN
HELP
THEM TO
BE FIT
AND
LIVE
HEALTHY LIFE WITHOUT ANY SYMPTOMS.

TO SUMMARIZE
,
PEOPLE
ARE BEING OBESE
BECAUSE
THEY
EAT
MORE
OUTSIDE
THAN COOKING BY THEMSELVES DUE TO THEIR UPLOAD
WORK
. I
THINK
, THEY COULD SOLVE THIS IF THEY DO
EXERCISES
AND
EAT
FOOD
COOKED AT HOME. THEY COULD BECOME HEALTHY IF THEY PARTICIPATE IN
OUDOOR
ACTIVITIES.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
8
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